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Many developed countries now have large numbers of people over the age of 65 years. What problems might this cause?

Many developed countries now have large numbers of people over the age of 65 years. What problems might this cause? PX7BX
In a various economically advanced countries citizens above the age of 65 years are resides. This could be possible due to various medical researches and improvements which leads to increase life cycle In large numbers of developing provisions medical science improve in a serious notes. They find various ways to avoid serious illness as well as various cures for that also if in case anybody affected by that. This will be helpful in enhance human life and give them life longevity ij addition it will be reduce the number of deaths. Due to decrease in death ratio people live long life and number of people who reached over the age of 65 years are consists majority of population of medically advnce countries.
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advanced countries citizens above the age of 65 years are resides. This could be possible due to
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various
medical researches and improvements which leads to increase
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life
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improve
in a serious
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. They find
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various
ways to avoid serious illness
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various
cures for that
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if in case anybody
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affected
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life
and give them
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life
longevity
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the number of deaths. Due to decrease in death ratio
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people
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live
long
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IELTS essay Many developed countries now have large numbers of people over the age of 65 years. What problems might this cause?

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