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Many companies use advertising to increase sales. What are the main reasons that make advertisement effective? Is it good or bad thing for the society? v.1

Many companies use advertising to increase sales. What are the main reasons that make advertisement effective? Is it good or bad thing for the society? v. 1
It is common that advertisements are used by companies in order to increase sales. There are few causes why advertising is so productive. In my opinion, it is as beneficial as harmful for the society. The main reason advertisements are successful is that they are targeting specific group of people who will be probably interested in it. For instance, different sports clothes, diet supplements, sport' s gear are promoted in such way that your training processes won’t be looking as much joyful as it could be with a product which an advertisement suggest. In addition, advertising is informing us about products and services about which people would not be aware if advertisements were not present. Those who believes that advertising is harmful, have many justifiable concerns such as is pervasive and invasive. It is everywhere and bombarding us with unnecessary messages any other minute. In addition, advertisements encourage us to make compulsive purchases of things that people not really need. For example, our society does not need any kind of junk food but adds push it persistently. In contradiction, any service or product, which people actually need, does not require any advertising. Thus, we would rarely see advertisements of such products as vegetables, meet, gasoline or utilities. However, advertising can be extremely beneficial for the society. Advertising is an incredibly effective and powerful way to spread the word about important issues and products, such as AIDS awareness, diabetes monitors, tobacco and alcohol risks, and other health-related concerns. If it were not for mass-market multi-media campaigns informing us about public health and safety concerns, the world would be a much more dangerous place. In conclusion, it is worth noting that advertising has both positive and negative aspects to it. On balance however, I think that the advantages of it outweigh the disadvantages.
It is common that
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advertisements
are
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used
by
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companies
in order to increase sales. There are few causes why advertising is
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so
productive. In my opinion, it is as beneficial as harmful for the society.

The main reason
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advertisements
are successful is that they are targeting specific group of
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people
who will be
probably
interested in it.
For instance
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different
sports clothes, diet supplements,
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are promoted
in such way that your training processes won’t be looking as much joyful as it could be with a
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product
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advertisement
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suggest
.
In addition
, advertising is informing us about
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products
and services about which
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people
would not be aware if
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advertisements
were not present.

Those who believes that advertising is harmful, have
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many
justifiable concerns such as is pervasive and invasive. It is everywhere and bombarding us with unnecessary messages any other minute.
In addition
,
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advertisements
encourage us to
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make
compulsive
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purchases
of things that
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people
not
really
need.
For example
, our society does not need any kind of junk food
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but
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adds
push it
persistently
. In contradiction, any service or
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product
, which
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people
actually need, does not require any advertising.
Thus
, we would rarely
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see
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advertisements
of such
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products
as vegetables,
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meet
, gasoline or utilities.

However
, advertising can be
extremely
beneficial for the society. Advertising is an
incredibly
effective and powerful way to spread the word about
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important
issues and
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products
, such as AIDS awareness, diabetes monitors, tobacco and alcohol
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risks
, and other health-related concerns. If it were not for mass-market multi-media campaigns informing us about public health and safety concerns, the world would be a much more
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dangerous
place.

In conclusion
, it is worth noting that advertising has both
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positive
and
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negative
aspects to it. On balance
however
, I
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think
that the advantages of it outweigh the disadvantages.
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15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many companies use advertising to increase sales. What are the main reasons that make advertisement effective? Is it good or bad thing for the society? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
301 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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