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Making cheery jamproduction.

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The picture shows the complete process of making cherry jam production. There are 9 main stages that include gathering cherries from the cherry tree at the start, and labeling jam containers in the factory at the end. Then, after checking the quality of the jam, the jars are filled with jam in an automated process. Finally, the jars are labeled, and the goods are now ready to be exported. First, cherries are collected by spreading a sheet on the ground and shaking the tree. Next, the cherries are collected and are transported by trucks. After that, cherries are sent into an automatic machine in order to remove the leaves and stems. Next, the washing process is done by machine, and they are moved on a ramp. The next stage involves cooking cherries in a giant pot with extra ingredients added. Then, after checking the quality of the jam, the jars are filled with jam in an automated process. Finally, the jars are labeled and the goods are now ready to be exported.
The picture
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shows
the complete process of making cherry jam production.

There are 9 main stages that include gathering
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cherries
from the cherry tree at the
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start
, and labeling jam containers in the factory at the
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end
.

Then, after checking the quality of the jam, the
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jars
are filled
with jam in an automated process.

Finally
, the
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jars
are labeled
, and the
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goods
are
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now
ready to
be exported
.

First
,
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cherries
are collected
by spreading a sheet on the ground and shaking the tree.

Next
, the
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cherries
are collected
and
are transported
by trucks.

After that,
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cherries
are
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sent
into an automatic machine in order to remove the
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leaves
and stems.

Next
, the washing process
is done
by machine, and they are
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moved
on a ramp.

The
next
stage involves cooking
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cherries
in a giant pot with extra ingredients
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added
.

Then, after checking the quality of the jam, the
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jars
are filled
with jam in an automated process.

Finally
, the
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jars
are labeled
and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
are
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now
ready to
be exported
.
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IELTS essay Making cheery jamproduction.

Essay
  American English
11 paragraphs
172 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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