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Make decisions for children

Make decisions for children MB6lN
Nurture children in the best way is one of the challenges that every parent is facing. There is an ague between two groups of people about how children could make their decisions. The first group believes that if children only decide by themselves for every matter in their lives, it would lead to erroneous results, while the second group claims that they must learn how to make decisions for issues related to them. This essay will discuss both views. However, I agree with the second group’s opinion. The people who contend that the children must not decide for everyday issues are concerned about the consequences that will affect others and bring some chaos. For example, if a child does not want to pay attention to the times that they must be present in the kindergarten, the result will influence the other children and their tutor too. Sometimes, it is needed to be a unique rule for all the children to prevent the following implications. The second group also does not deny this fact, but they state that the children must learn sometimes they are just on their own, and it is essential for them to accept their actions. Produce a positive effect on them so that they could have more confidence socially. As a result, when they become older, they are more responsible than the others and also have little hesitation for making important decisions in their life and also in their jobs. I think it is vital for them to learn these behaviors since they are just a child. However, this could not mean that they can do whatever they want. Apart from that, considering the other factors is essential too. In conclusion, although the children are not allowed to do whatever they want, they should have fundamental responsibilities to achieve future success in their lives.
Nurture
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children
in the best way is one of the challenges that every parent is facing. There is an ague between two
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groups
of
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people
about how
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children
could
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make
their decisions. The
first
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group
believes that if
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children
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only
decide by themselves for every matter in their
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lives
, it would lead to erroneous results, while the second
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group
claims that they
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must
learn how to
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make
decisions for issues related to them.

This essay will discuss both views.
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, I
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agree
with the second
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group’s
opinion.

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people
who contend that the
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children
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must
not decide for everyday issues
are concerned
about the consequences that will affect others and bring
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some
chaos.
For example
, if a child does not want to pay attention to the times that they
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must
be present in the kindergarten, the result will influence the
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other
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children
and their tutor too.
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is needed
to be a unique
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rule
for all the
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children
to
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prevent
the following implications.

The second
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group
also
does not deny this fact,
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but
they state that the
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children
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must
learn
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sometimes
they are
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on their
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own
, and it is essential for them to accept their actions. Produce a
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positive
effect on them
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so
that they could have more confidence
socially
.
As a result
, when they become older, they are more responsible than the others and
also
have
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little
hesitation for making
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important
decisions in their life and
also
in their jobs. I
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think
it is vital for them to learn these behaviors since they are
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just
a child.
However
, this could not mean that they can do whatever they want. Apart from that, considering the
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other
factors is essential too.

In conclusion
, although the
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children
are not
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allowed
to do whatever they want, they should have fundamental responsibilities to achieve future success in their
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lives
.
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IELTS essay Make decisions for children

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
307 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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