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Living in big cities is bad for health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, increasing number of people are raising concern about their health and they wish to live a healthy lifestyle. Some people hold the opinion that big cities are not an ideal place for their health. Personally, I disagree with this opinion. The first benefit of living in big cities is the accessibility of advanced medical treatments from professional medical technicians and the best medical devices. In addition, there are a large number of medical foundations/ organizations in urban areas and that helps people to easily approach to medical services. Thanks to that, people would more concern about their health and go to the hospital to check up their health more frequently, and symptoms of diseases would be found out sooner and rate of healing would be significantly increased, particularly hard to cure diseases, such as cancer or HIV. Besides, there are a lot of fitness centers based in large cities which encourage citizens to go to and take up exercises to improve their health. And finally, the most vital thing that helps people enjoy the mentioned conveniences easily, is the infrastructure being looked to appropriately by authorities. The high-quality infrastructure would help save money and time, people would have more time and money to spend on other important things. Not only that, it also helps to reduce stress, making people feel more pleasant and satisfied with lives. This feeling plays a critical role in good health and positive
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people
are raising concern about their
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health and
they wish to
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live
a healthy lifestyle.
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Some
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people
hold the opinion that
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big
cities are not an ideal place for their
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health
.
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, I disagree with this opinion. The
first
benefit of living in
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big
cities is the accessibility of advanced
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medical
treatments from professional
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medical
technicians and the best
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medical
devices.
In addition
, there are
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a large number of
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medical
foundations/ organizations in urban areas and that
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helps
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people
to
easily
approach to
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medical
services. Thanks to that,
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people
would more concern about their
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health
and go to the hospital to
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check
up their
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health
more
frequently
, and symptoms of diseases would
be found
out sooner and rate of healing would be
significantly
increased,
particularly
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hard
to cure diseases, such as cancer or HIV.
Besides
, there are
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a lot of
fitness centers based in large cities which encourage citizens to go to and take up exercises to
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improve
their
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health
. And
finally
, the most vital thing that
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helps
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people
enjoy the mentioned conveniences
easily
, is the infrastructure
being looked
to
appropriately
by authorities. The high-quality infrastructure would
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help
save money and time,
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people
would have more time and money to spend on other
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important
things. Not
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helps
to
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reduce
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stress
, making
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people
feel more pleasant and satisfied with
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lives
. This feeling plays a critical role in
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good
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health
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positive
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IELTS essay Living in big cities is bad for health.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
237 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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