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Living in an apartment instead of a university dormitory has advantages and disadvantages. v.3

Living in an apartment instead of a university dormitory has advantages and disadvantages. v. 3
After getting admitted to a university, a student needs to decide where to live and this choice severely affects his academic performance and student life. While most universities offer residence facility for students, many opt to live in an apartment and this has both benefits and demerits. This essay probe the advantages and disadvantages of living in a separate apartment than living in the university provided residential houses. Living in an apartment offers many distinct advantages and the privacy is one of them. While a university dormitory is shared by several students, someone living in an apartment enjoys far more freedom and privacy than the students living in dormitories. He can choose a quiet neighbourhood and this environment is conducive for studying attentively. Furthermore, living in an apartment makes students more independent and they can choose a more healthy diet. Finally, apartments are tidier than the dormitory and pupils can stay away from bad influences. For instance, one of my cousins had to move to an apartment after living in a university dormitory for about six months and his main reason for the shift was cleanliness. Having said that, there are some visible disadvantages of living in a flat rather than living in a university residence hall. First and foremost is the cost. In my country living in an apartment is quite expensive while university offers cheap accommodation. The food on the university campus is also cheaper while this is not the case when a student lives in a flat away from the university. Second, renting an apartment in my city is hard for a student. The landlords prefer families over the students. Furthermore, the daily commuting is convenient from the university halls while not so easy from the apartments away from the university campus. Last but not the least, campus staying students have better interaction with seniors and teachers. Even though there are many advantages of living in an apartment, I would prefer to live in the university dormitory. The first and foremost reason for me to be able to attend my classes without commuting through bad traffic. I hate to wait in the heavy traffic and as I do not own a car. I would also like to enjoy my university life and stay in touch with my seniors, teachers and classmates whenever possible. The university life has so many things to offer and I do not want to miss them.
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university
, a
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student
needs to decide where to
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live
and this choice
severely
affects his academic performance and
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student
life. While most
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universities
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offer
residence facility for
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students
,
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many
opt to
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live
in an
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apartment
and this has both benefits and demerits. This essay probe the advantages and disadvantages of
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living
in a separate
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apartment
than
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living
in the
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university
provided residential
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houses
.

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apartment
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offers
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many
distinct advantages and the privacy is one of them. While a
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university
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dormitory
is shared
by several
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students
, someone
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living
in an
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apartment
enjoys far more freedom and privacy than the
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students
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living
in
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dormitories
. He can choose a quiet
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neighbourhood
and this environment is conducive for studying
attentively
.
Furthermore
,
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living
in an
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apartment
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makes
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students
more
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independent and
they can choose a more healthy diet.
Finally
,
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apartments
are tidier than the
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dormitory
and pupils can stay away from
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bad
influences.
For instance
, one of my cousins had to
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move
to an
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apartment
after
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living
in a
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university
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dormitory
for about six months and his main reason for the shift was cleanliness.

Having said that, there are
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some
visible disadvantages of
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living
in a flat
rather
than
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living
in a
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university
residence hall.
First
and foremost is the cost. In my country
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living
in an
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apartment
is quite expensive while
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university
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offers
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cheap
accommodation. The food on the
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university
campus is
also
cheaper while this is not the case when a
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student
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lives
in a flat away from the
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university
. Second, renting an
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apartment
in my city is
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hard
for a
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student
. The landlords prefer families over the
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students
.
Furthermore
, the daily commuting is convenient from the
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university
halls while not
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so
easy from the
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apartments
away from the
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university
campus. Last
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but
not the least, campus staying
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students
have better interaction with seniors and teachers.

Even though
there are
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many
advantages of
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living
in an
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apartment
, I would prefer to
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live
in the
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university
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dormitory
. The
first
and foremost reason for me to be able to attend my classes without commuting through
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bad
traffic. I hate to wait in the heavy traffic and as I do not
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own
a car. I would
also
like to enjoy my
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university
life and stay in touch with my seniors, teachers and classmates whenever possible. The
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university
life has
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so
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many
things to
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offer
and I do not want to miss them.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
58Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Living in an apartment instead of a university dormitory has advantages and disadvantages. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
403 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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