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Living in 3 or 4 generation is a good idea

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I agree that living in a family of three or four generations is a good idea. I believe living in an extended family has three main benefits. First, family members can provide and receive support from each other. For example, grandparents can take care of the children while their parents are busy. Second, the relationship between each member of the extended family is closer and more loving. Moreover, the children in that family have a great opportunity to develop social skills and learn to solve problems effectively because they get along well with other children in the family. But with the good side, there is also the bad side.
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that living in a
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of three or four generations is a
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. I believe living in an extended
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family
has three main benefits.

First
,
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members can provide and receive support from each other.
For example
, grandparents can take care of the children while their parents are busy. Second, the relationship between each member of the extended
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family
is closer and more loving.
Moreover
, the children in that family

have a great opportunity to develop social
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skills
and learn to solve problems
effectively
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because
they
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get
along well with other children in the
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.
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But
with the
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side, there is
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IELTS essay Living in 3 or 4 generation is a good idea

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
109 words
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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