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Write en article answering to the following questions: What forms of transport will we be using in 50 years' time? Where will we take our holidays?

Write en article answering to the following questions: What forms of transport will we be using in 50 years' time? Where will we take our holidays? NlA5d
The galaxy travels every year as you study more, because everyone wants to go to another planet on vacation, don't they? Also, I believe 2 ways are very cheap and fast and it will be used in 50 years so I would like to be the first to ride in the spaceship. Moreover, I think the best transport in 50 years it’s a caravan with propellers, because I can go to the galaxy without any problem and I have all the things for staying a long time there. Also, I can go with more people, because it's bigger than a spaceship and comfortable. Another transport, it can be a house that has strong thrusters and when you want to go back home the big magnet attracts your house. Furthermore, if the company creates a transport in the next few years, I will go to another galaxy and planet, because I feel free with anyone. Also, I can see all the beginnings and planets differently from the earth plane. In conclusion, the galaxy is the next station in 50 years, because nowadays we are searching for new destinations. Do you travel to the galaxy?
The galaxy travels every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
year
as you study more,
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because
everyone wants to go to another planet on vacation, don't they?
Also
, I believe 2 ways are
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very
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cheap
and
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fast
and it will be
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used
in 50 years
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so
I would like to be the
first
to ride in the spaceship.

Moreover
, I
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think
the best transport in 50 years it’s a caravan with propellers,
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because
I can go to the galaxy without any problem and I have all the things for staying a long time there.
Also
, I can
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go with
more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
,
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because
it's bigger than a spaceship and comfortable. Another transport, it can be a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
that has strong thrusters and when you want to go back home the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
magnet attracts your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.

Furthermore
, if the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
creates
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "transport".
a transport
in the
next
few years, I will go to another galaxy and planet,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I feel free with anyone.
Also
, I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
all the beginnings and planets
differently


from the earth
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plane
.

In conclusion
, the galaxy is the
next
station in 50 years,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
nowadays we are searching for new destinations. Do you travel to the galaxy?
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IELTS essay Write en article answering to the following questions: What forms of transport will we be using in 50 years' time? Where will we take our holidays?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
193 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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