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Line graphh/trade bar chart/comparision

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The line graph illustrates statics of two gender male and female who did telework in the United Kingdom For 9 years. The bar chart shows their location of the workforce in the last year of 2005. overall, we can see that the number of men employees, always were more than women in teleworking. additionally, the most striking sector for location based on their job title is skilled trades workers, who had the highest rate in doing the job in the diverse places. As regards the first, the amount of working from out of the company among both genders was approximately close to each wither by 3/5% for women and just under 5% for men. These amounts rose steadily over the years which got doubled and reached well above 10% in 2005 for men and the 5/5% for women in the last year. As for their working place, it is apparent that the percentage of the workforces as skilled trades and who use their home as a base is by far more than other occupations with 18% in 2005 while their rate for employees who do their job in their own home was just 1/5%. The amount for the managers and senior officials with professionals was roughly the same with just above 10% for the former and well under 10% for the latter in working in the house as a base.
The line graph illustrates statics of two gender male and female
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did telework in the United Kingdom For 9 years. The bar chart
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shows
their location of the workforce in the last year of 2005.
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overall
, we can
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see
that the number of
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men
employees, always were more than women in teleworking.
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additionally
, the most striking sector for location based on their job title
is skilled
trades workers,
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who
had the highest rate in doing the job in the diverse places.

As regards the
first
, the amount of working from out of the
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company
among both genders was approximately close to each wither by 3/5% for women and
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just
under 5% for
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men
. These amounts rose
steadily
over the years which
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got
doubled and reached well above 10% in 2005 for
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men
and the 5/5% for women in the last year.

As for their working place, it is apparent that the percentage of the
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workforces
as skilled trades and
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who
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use
their home as a base is by far more than other occupations with 18% in 2005 while their rate for employees
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who
do their job in their
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own
home was
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just
1/5%.

The amount for the managers and senior officials with professionals was roughly the same with
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just
above 10% for the former and well under 10% for the latter in working in the
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house
as a base.
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IELTS essay Line graphh/trade bar chart/comparision

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
230 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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