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life has become much more stressful compared to our parent’s generation. As a result, stress related illnesses are increasing around the world. Why is stress such a problem in the modern world and what do you think can be done to overcome the problems c v.1

life has become much more stressful compared to our parent’s generation. As a result, stress related illnesses are increasing around the world. Why is stress such a problem in the modern world and what do you think can be done to overcome the problems c v. 1
Technology has come across too far to ease the lives of human beings. In the same way, one day will come when artificial intelligence will overtake current human resources. I believe this is going to be true that many jobs would be done by robots for the sake of efficiency, however, there are still some tasks which require human involvement. Addressing the stance, the coming era is a time of efficiency at a faster pace so to achieve the same, these computers have to be incorporated into the workforce. To fulfil the current demand, computers are the best substitute for human beings. Moreover, they do not even demand leave from work and eventually work for twenty-four seven. Take Vardhman Mills Private Limited for instance, who plans to introduce unmanned warehouse in their plant to improve the efficiency. Resultantly, there is no question to ask that machines would be used as workers for companies all around the world, but still, there are some jobs which can only be managed by real humans. Talking about the other side, there are some jobs which require human skills like critical thinking which cannot be provided by artificially intelligent robots. Specifically, marketing jobs require critical thinking which can change the fate of companies. This is why such jobs cannot be regarded as an appropriate job for artificially intelligent robots. Ultimately, it is crystal clear that the artificially intelligent robot workers are going to be a real reality of the near future, whereas some jobs such as marketing would be taken by humans only. Compiling my thoughts, the truth of the future is that robots will be working in companies, but I strongly feel that some job profiles like marketing managers is not a task for robots but for humans due to their critical thinking ability.
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when artificial intelligence will overtake
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jobs
would
be done
by robots for the sake of efficiency,
however
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still
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some
tasks which require
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human
involvement.

Addressing the stance, the coming era is a time of efficiency at a faster pace
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to achieve the same, these computers
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have to
be incorporated
into the workforce. To fulfil the
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current
demand, computers are the best substitute for
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human
beings.
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, they do not even demand
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from work and
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work for twenty-four seven. Take
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Mills Private Limited
for instance
, who plans to introduce unmanned warehouse in their plant to
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improve
the efficiency.
Resultantly
, there is no question to ask that machines would be
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used
as workers for
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companies
all around the world,
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still
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be managed
by real humans.

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jobs
which require
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skills
like critical thinking which cannot
be provided
by
artificially
intelligent robots.
Specifically
, marketing
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jobs
require critical thinking which can
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change
the fate of
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companies
. This is why such
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jobs
cannot
be regarded
as an appropriate
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job
for
artificially
intelligent robots.
Ultimately
, it is crystal
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clear
that the
artificially
intelligent robot workers are going to be a real reality of the near future, whereas
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jobs
such as marketing would
be taken
by
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humans
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only
.

Compiling my thoughts, the truth of the future is that robots will be working in
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companies
,
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but
I
strongly
feel that
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some
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profiles like marketing managers is not a task for robots
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for
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humans
due to their critical thinking ability.
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IELTS essay life has become much more stressful compared to our parent’s generation. As a result, stress related illnesses are increasing around the world. Why is stress such a problem in the modern world and what do you think can be done to overcome the problems c v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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