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Life challenges or circumstances that may have impacted your ability to achieve your educational goals and explain how you have overcome those challenges

Nowadays, there are many challenges in front of most of the students who intend to continue their education especially when they have not a strong strategy to obtain their educational goals. As an enthusiastic student in mechanical engineering, I require plenty of energy in order to overcome several difficulties which appear every week even every day in my personal life. In following essay, I have decided to explain briefly two fundamental problems and their solutions during my educational period which had great influences on my educational aims. First, the biggest challenge which have impacted my capability to acquire my educational goal is economic problems. In my personal lifestyle there are basic requirements which are related to economic situation and if these requirements can not be satisfied, I will not be a prosperous student. As a result, I have to work as a full-time employee, so I can not assign enough time on my lessons and my duties as a student. After long work hours I feel exhausted; therefore, my studding output will reduce definitely. Another important problem is different hobbies and entertainments, such as online games and social media around us which are extremely exciting and time-consuming process. Unfortunately, when I start surfing on social media, I have lost track of time due to their attractive characteristics and they have taken plenty of time, so time management is difficult. Furthermore, they distract me during study by their particular notification sounds on my phone. In my opinion, there are two basic ways in order to overcome economic issues during educational period. The first one is finding a part time job that requires less time comparing full time job, consequently I can dedicate much time on my lessons and assignments, simultaneously the majority of my requirements will be satisfied and it leads to be prepared in facing economic challenges. The second one is applying for a full fund or a scholarship in a reputable university or college. I need to learn new ways to improve my concentration and my capabilities during my studies due to prevent of being attracted to appealing entertainments. I try new methods and strategies that psychologists and experts suggest controlling my mind, particularly when I face appealing and attractive entertainments because I prefer to be serious and studious student instead of being lazy and distracted. Applying these ways contributes me to increase my studies output. In conclusion, challenges and circumstances which can appear as huge obstacles in front of our educational goals. Main obstacles have been mentioned as economic problems and existence of attractive entertainments. Practical and empirical solution to decrease detrimental effects of above challenges considering their different aspects were presented.
Nowadays, there are
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challenges
in front of most of the
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students
who intend to continue their education
especially
when they have not a strong strategy to obtain their
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educational
goals. As an enthusiastic
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student
in mechanical engineering, I require
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plenty
of energy in order to overcome several difficulties which appear every week even every day in my personal life. In following essay, I have decided to
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explain
briefly
two fundamental
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problems
and their solutions during my
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educational
period which had great influences on my
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educational
aims.

First
, the biggest
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challenge
which have impacted my capability to acquire my
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educational
goal is
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economic
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problems
. In my personal lifestyle there are basic requirements which
are related
to
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economic
situation and if these requirements can not
be satisfied
, I will not be a prosperous
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student
.
As a result
, I
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have to
work as a full-time employee,
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so
I can not assign
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enough
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time
on my lessons and my duties as a
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student
. After long work hours I feel exhausted;
therefore
, my studding output will
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reduce
definitely. Another
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important
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problem
is
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different
hobbies and entertainments, such as online games and social media around us which are
extremely
exciting and time-consuming process. Unfortunately, when I
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start
surfing on social media, I have lost
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track
of
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time
due to their attractive
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characteristics and
they have taken
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of
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time
,
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so
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management is difficult.
Furthermore
, they distract me during study by their particular notification sounds on my phone.

In my opinion, there are two basic ways in order to overcome
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economic
issues during
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educational
period. The
first
one is finding a part
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time
job that requires less
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time
comparing full
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time
job,
consequently
I can dedicate much
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time
on my lessons and assignments,
simultaneously
the majority of my requirements will be
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satisfied and
it leads to
be prepared
in facing
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economic
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challenges
. The second one is applying for a full fund or a scholarship in a reputable university or college. I need to learn new ways to
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improve
my concentration and my capabilities during my studies due to
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prevent
of
being attracted
to appealing entertainments. I try new methods and strategies that psychologists and experts suggest controlling my mind,
particularly
when I face appealing and attractive entertainments
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because
I prefer to be serious and studious
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student
instead
of being lazy and distracted. Applying these ways contributes me to increase my studies output.

In conclusion
,
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challenges
and circumstances which can appear as huge obstacles in front of our
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educational
goals. Main obstacles have
been mentioned
as
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economic
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problems
and existence of attractive entertainments. Practical and empirical solution to decrease detrimental effects of above
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challenges
considering their
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different
aspects
were presented
.
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IELTS essay Life challenges or circumstances that may have impacted your ability to achieve your educational goals and explain how you have overcome those challenges

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
444 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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