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Letter to a manager about the book you order online but you didn’t received until now. In the letter, you should: give the details of the orderdescribe why do you need it now, and say what do you want the company do. v.1

Letter to a manager about the book you order online but you didn’t received until now. In the letter, you should: give the details of the orderdescribe why do you need it now, and say what do you want the company do. v. 1
Altering job has become an increasing prevalence in many countries these days. This trend is mainly due to support their basics as well as luxurious demand and far promotion purpose. However, there are many choices people can do to get ready for upcoming prospects. One of the imperative causes of changing jobs rapidly is to fulfil the ever-increasing requirement of life. Due to the globalization era and the advent of technological advancements, it is very difficult to survive on low pay, since they are not able to meet basic needs. As a result, they are compelled to shift jobs relatively. Furthermore, promotion is another reason for which jobs can be changed often working for a long time in the same company. Augmenting employees do not tend to get a high promotion. Consequently, it leads them to quit their current job and search for a new job. For instance, a survey conducted by the Times of India found that 65% of employees, who are working in the same firm for more than 5 years were less inclined to get promotions so they usually choose to change job rather than continue in a similar organization. However, the aforementioned causes are a real concern there are several measures that employees could do for having a better job prospects shortly. Firstly, owing to excessive competition, it is need of time to be up to date with the latest technologies and keep pace with the world. Hence, employees should do short term courses so that they tend to fulfil the employer's vision and interpret customer demand. Moreover, skills like communication and co-operative and leadership skills, play an integral role in preparing job seekers good opportunity. If any persons possess such qualities wherever he will go inevitably he seems to have more good job opportunities in the future than a person who does not occupy such abilities. For example, it can be seen that 54% of total employees do not face any hurdles on the way, rather they have much better job prospect soon because of having such skills. In conclusion, shifting jobs often brought about by getting high promotions as well as supporting basic demand of life. Only when employees keep himself familiar with the latest technology by attending or enrolling session and possess some indispensable quality, will be prepared for work in the future.
Altering
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job
has become an increasing prevalence in
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many
countries these days. This trend is
mainly
due to support their basics
as well
as luxurious demand and far promotion purpose.
However
, there are
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many
choices
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people
can do to
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get
ready for upcoming prospects.

One of the imperative causes of changing
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jobs
rapidly
is to fulfil the ever-increasing requirement of life. Due to the globalization era and the advent of technological advancements, it is
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very
difficult to survive on low pay, since they are not able to
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meet
basic needs.
As a result
, they
are compelled
to shift
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jobs
relatively
.
Furthermore
, promotion is another reason for which
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jobs
can be
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changed
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often
working for a long time in the same
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company
. Augmenting
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employees
do not tend to
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get
a high promotion.
Consequently
, it leads them to quit their
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current
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job
and search for a new
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job
.
For instance
, a survey conducted by
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the Times of India
found that 65% of
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employees
, who are working in the same firm for more than 5 years were less inclined to
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get
promotions
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so
they
usually
choose to
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change
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job
rather
than continue in a similar organization.

However
, the aforementioned causes are a real concern there are several measures that
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employees
could do for having a better
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job
prospects shortly.
Firstly
, owing to excessive competition, it
is need
of time to be up to date with the latest technologies and
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keep
pace with the world.
Hence
,
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employees
should do short term courses
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so
that they tend to fulfil the employer's vision and interpret customer demand.
Moreover
,
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skills
like communication and co-operative and leadership
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skills
, play an integral role in preparing
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job
seekers
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good
opportunity. If any persons possess such qualities wherever he will go
inevitably
he seems to have more
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good
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job
opportunities in the future than a person who does not occupy such abilities.
For example
, it can be
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seen
that 54% of total
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employees
do not face any hurdles on the way,
rather
they have much better
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job
prospect
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soon
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because
of having such
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skills
.

In conclusion
, shifting
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jobs
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often
brought about by getting high promotions
as well
as supporting basic demand of life.
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Only
when
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employees
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
himself familiar with the latest technology by attending or enrolling session and possess
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some
indispensable quality, will
be prepared
for work in the future.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Letter to a manager about the book you order online but you didn’t received until now. In the letter, you should: give the details of the orderdescribe why do you need it now, and say what do you want the company do. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
390 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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