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Learning english at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion is it important for everyone to learn English. Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and if so how? v.4

Learning english at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion is it important for everyone to learn English. Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and if so how? v. 4
Indigineous languages are gradually phasing out due to the fact that they are not taught in learning instituitions. I believe it is paramount for all to learn english because it could act as a universal language for communication, however, we should prevent the extinction of native9uyh languages by using them as a means of communicating at informal settings as well as incorporating them into schools curriculum. Native language helps us stay connected to our tradition and culture. This means that speaking the language would encourage people to stay connected to their roots while using this medium to pass down the tradition from generation to generation. To exemplify, a survey carried out by university of Oxford reveals that those who speak their local language practice their culture more and prefer wearing their traditional wears. Furthermore, indigineous language could be used as a means of learning ones history written by the forefathers thousands of years ago, which unfortunately would look like alien language to people that do not understand the language. These languages could be protected from dying out by learning them in instituitions just the way other subjects like mathematics are taught. In addition, parent could enforce their kids communicate to them through native languages at early age. Moreover, those who speak their languages in schools should not be purnished for speaking vernacular but encouraged. For instance, some schools have rules banning students from communicating to one another through local language except in english, these rules should be scrapped. To conclude, english language could be used as a tool for teaching in schools thereby making it a necessity for all to learn. On the other hand, the importance of indigineous language in our society cannot be overlooked and therefore be allowed to thrive by teaching and speaking them.
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. I believe it is paramount for all to learn
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language
for communication,
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prevent
the extinction of native9uyh
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languages
by using them as a means of communicating at informal settings
as well
as incorporating them into
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schools
curriculum.

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language
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helps
us stay connected to our tradition and culture. This means that speaking the
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language
would encourage
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people
to stay connected to their roots while using this medium to pass down the tradition from generation to generation. To exemplify, a survey carried out by
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university of Oxford
reveals that those who speak their local
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language
practice their culture more and prefer wearing their traditional wears.
Furthermore
,
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language
could be
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used
as a means of learning
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history written by the forefathers thousands of years ago, which unfortunately would look like alien
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language
to
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people
that do not understand the language.

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languages
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be protected
from dying out by learning them in
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instituitions
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just
the way other subjects like mathematics
are taught
.
In addition
, parent could enforce their kids communicate to them through native
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languages
at early age.
Moreover
, those who speak their
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languages
in
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schools
should not be
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purnished
for speaking vernacular
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encouraged.
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rules
banning students from communicating to one another through local
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language
except in
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english
, these
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rules
should
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.

To conclude
,
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english
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language
could be
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used
as a tool for teaching in
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schools
thereby making it a necessity for all to learn.
On the other hand
, the importance of
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indigineous
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language
in our society cannot
be overlooked
and
therefore
be
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allowed
to thrive by teaching and speaking them.
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IELTS essay Learning english at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion is it important for everyone to learn English. Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and if so how? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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