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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local language and so, how? v.2

Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local language and so, how? v. 2
English is actually considered as the universal language for communication. Hence, the importance is given in schools to learn it as a priority with other subjects. Which in-turn, presents us with the threat of local language extinction. Generally the students tend to learn their local languages first. So they do have a good foundation of it. As they begin to level up in school, English is preferred to the native tongue as it opens the door to various opportunities across the world. My general opinion is to present an approach that strikes out a good balance between learning these two languages. Based on my life experiences, English does provide a competitive edge in terms of communication. Candidates with the fluency in English have a better chance in landing a job or admission to college compared to their counterparts. Additionally, English does provide a pathway to the global market of trade and job scope. Therefore, it is essential for the students to master the language in the school. Although, the English language gives immense advantage to one's communication with the outside world. It is also significant for the school students to learn their local language with the same level of importance as given to English. The local language symbolizes the tradition, the culture and it is also provides one's own unique identity in the world. In conclusion, the schools should come up with a system, where learning the local languages along with English is mandatory for attaining a good grade. Hopefully, this system can push more towards the equality of learning these two languages for the betterment of society and as well for an individual.
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language
for communication.
Hence
, the importance is
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given
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schools
to learn it as a priority with other subjects. Which in-turn, presents us with the threat of
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local
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language
extinction.

Generally
the students tend to learn their
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local
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languages
first
.
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So
they do have a
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good
foundation of it. As they
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begin
to level up in
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school
, English
is preferred
to the native tongue as it opens the door to various opportunities across the world. My general opinion is to present an approach that strikes out a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
balance between learning these two languages.

Based on my life experiences, English does provide a competitive edge in terms of communication. Candidates with the fluency in English have a better chance in landing a job or admission to college compared to their counterparts.
Additionally
, English does provide a pathway to the global market of trade and job scope.
Therefore
, it is essential for the students to master the
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language
in the school.

“Although” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Although
, the English
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language
gives immense advantage to one's communication with the outside world. It is
also
significant for the
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school
students to learn their
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local
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language
with the same level of importance as
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given
to English. The
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local
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language
symbolizes the tradition, the culture and it is
also
provides one's
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own
unique identity in the world.

In conclusion
, the
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schools
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
up with a system, where learning the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
languages
along with English is mandatory for attaining a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
grade.
Hopefully
, this system can push more towards the equality of learning these two
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languages
for the betterment of society and
as well
for an individual.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Language is the blood of the soul into which thoughts run and out of which they grow.
Oliver Wendell Holmes

IELTS essay Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local language and so, how? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
274 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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