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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.12

Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. v. 12
Some people believe that studying history is of no benefit in the current era in which we live in. I totally disagree with the statement above that learning about the past has no value because the achievements made by humankind are only possible because people always learnt from their past. The main reason for this is that human evolution is possible only because people accumulate experience and knowledge based on the historical events of their ancestors. This helps people make better decisions by reflecting on historical outcomes involving similar decisions and situations. For example, buildings are constructed in places that are free from floods and other natural disasters. People improve their life by learning from their mistakes and trying to avoid them next time. For instance, we are now experiencing a relatively peaceful world due to people learning from the past that wars are just too costly. Another important aspect is that future discoveries are always based on past knowledge. Take for example the Internet. This discovery is really based upon telephony. In the past, we learned how to carry voices over telephones and then later on someone thought of the idea of carrying data over telephones. Therefore, the Internet would not exist if it weren’t for the invention of the telephone. To summarise, I think that learning from the past is essential to our lives because we can prevent remaking past mistakes and we can make technological advancements based on past inventions. Therefore, I believe that history lessons should form a critical part of our education.
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in. I
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has no value
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only
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because
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people
accumulate experience and knowledge based on the historical
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events
of their ancestors. This
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helps
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people
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make
better decisions by reflecting on historical outcomes involving similar decisions and situations.
For example
, buildings
are constructed
in places that are free from floods and other natural disasters.
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People
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improve
their life by
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learning
from their mistakes and trying to avoid them
next
time.
For instance
, we are
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now
experiencing a
relatively
peaceful world due to
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people
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learning
from the
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past
that wars are
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just
too costly.

Another
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important
aspect is that future discoveries are always based on
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past
knowledge. Take
for example
the Internet. This discovery is
really
based upon telephony. In the
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past
, we learned how to carry voices over telephones and then later on someone
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thought
of the
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idea
of carrying data over telephones.
Therefore
, the Internet would not exist if it weren’t for the invention of the telephone.

To
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summarise
, I
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that
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learning
from the
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past
is essential to our
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lives
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because
we can
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prevent
remaking
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mistakes and
we can
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make
technological advancements based on
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past
inventions.
Therefore
, I believe that history lessons should form a critical part of our education.
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IELTS essay Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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