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LEADERS AND DIRECTORS IN AN ORGANIZATION ARE NORMALLY OLDER PEOPLE. SOME PEOPLE THINK YOUNG LEADERS WOULD BE BETTER. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

LEADERS AND DIRECTORS IN AN ORGANIZATION ARE NORMALLY OLDER PEOPLE. SOME PEOPLE THINK YOUNG LEADERS WOULD BE BETTER. PgjQX
Nowadays, people who are running a particular organisation, are mature-aged. However, it is thought by some that youth would be better leaders. This essay will clarify why I oppose the aforementioned idea. To start with, there are some pros of managing a company by an aged person. One of them is that it requires more experiences, as elderly people have more running skills than youngsters. For example, should a company face with a particular challange, most spry men will sort out it with their long-term experiences. Thus, organisations should be controlled by aged people.
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people
who are running a particular
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However
, it is
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thought
by
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that youth would be better leaders. This essay will clarify why I oppose the aforementioned
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idea
.

To
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start
with, there are
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some
pros of managing a
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company
by an aged person. One of them is that it requires more experiences, as elderly
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people
have more running
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skills
than youngsters.
For example
, should a
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company
face with a particular
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challange
, most spry
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men
will sort out it with their long-term experiences.
Thus
,
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organisations
should
be controlled
by aged
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IELTS essay LEADERS AND DIRECTORS IN AN ORGANIZATION ARE NORMALLY OLDER PEOPLE. SOME PEOPLE THINK YOUNG LEADERS WOULD BE BETTER.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
94 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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