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Large shopping malls are replacing small shops. What is your opinion about this? v.6

Large shopping malls are replacing small shops. What is your opinion about this? v. 6
This is a true fact to consider that the present world has become a global village. Therefore, people are motivated to buy their necessities from the competitive market. As a result, a great number of shopping malls has established in the past two decades in almost all cities of the world. Considering this there are some analysts who hold an opinion that large shopping malls are replacing small shops, while others consider that, large shopping malls should not be replacing small shops. This essay will assertion both side of this contention before deducing a reasonable conclusion. There are reasons for people to believe that large shopping malls are important to be established as multi stories shopping malls come with a large number of stores and other facilities under one roof.   First and foremost time saving from shopping from such multi-complex buildings could be a significant factor.   It may be defined as the majority of them prefer to go to the shopping malls rather than the single stores because a variety of options are available in one complex. For example, clothes, groceries, banks, pharmacies, cinemas, food courts, and restaurants etc. are all available under a single roof and people get better environment from such an establishment. There are some groups who are in favour of single shops and opine that this trend should be continued. They have their reasons as well.   In spite of views discussed above regarding why large shopping malls are ideal to the modern society.   Parking problems could be a substantial reason behind the opponent's viewpoint. There including excursive crowding in the shopping complex, especially on weekends and holidays. As a result, shoppers have to spend a long time in the parking bays rather than shopping in small shops.   The prices in large shopping malls are often unreasonable and people end up purchasing more than they actually need. The large shopping malls are not often convenient for the lower and middle-class population. In last, undoubtedly, whether shopping in a large shopping complex or single small shops could be a matter of discussion; however, as far as I am concerned, big shopping malls have immense benefits to the modern society that outweigh the options and conveniences offered by the small shops.
This is a true fact to consider that the present world has become a global village.
Therefore
,
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people
are motivated
to
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buy
their necessities from the competitive market.
As a result
, a great number of
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shopping
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malls
has established in the past two decades in almost all cities of the world. Considering this there are
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some
analysts who hold an opinion that
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large
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shopping
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malls
are replacing
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small
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shops
, while others consider that,
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large
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shopping
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malls
should not be replacing
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small
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shops
. This essay will assertion both side of this contention
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before
deducing a reasonable conclusion.

There are reasons for
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people
to believe that
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large
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shopping
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malls
are
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important
to
be established
as multi stories
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shopping
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malls
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come
with a
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large
number of stores and other facilities under one roof.
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First
and foremost time saving from
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shopping
from such multi-complex buildings could be a significant factor.
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It may
be defined
as the majority of them prefer to go to the
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shopping
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malls
rather
than the
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single
stores
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because
a variety of options are available in one complex.
For example
, clothes, groceries, banks, pharmacies, cinemas, food courts, and restaurants etc. are all available under a
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single
roof and
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people
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get
better environment from such an establishment.

There are
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some
groups who are in
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favour
of
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single
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shops
and opine that this trend should
be continued
. They have their reasons
as well
.
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In spite of
views discussed above regarding why
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large
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shopping
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malls
are ideal to the modern society.
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Parking problems could be a substantial reason behind the opponent's viewpoint. There including excursive crowding in the
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shopping
complex,
especially
on weekends and holidays.
As a result
, shoppers
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have to
spend a long time in the parking bays
rather
than
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shopping
in
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small
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shops
.
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The prices in
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large
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are
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often
unreasonable and
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people
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end
up purchasing more than they actually need. The
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large
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shopping
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malls
are not
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often
convenient for the lower and middle-
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class
population.

In last,
undoubtedly
, whether
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in a
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large
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shopping
complex or
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single
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small
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shops
could be a matter of discussion;
however
, as far as I
am concerned
,
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big
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shopping
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have immense benefits to the modern society that outweigh the options and conveniences offered by the
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small
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shops
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
52Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Large shopping malls are replacing small shops. What is your opinion about this? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
377 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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