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Large, impressive building and money spend on improving schools and hospitals

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Certain people believe that tall and impressive constructions significantly matter for a city. Others however say that funds should be paid for schools and hospitals development. On the one hand, I agree that the striking buildings play a crucial role on the town’s landscape to be more remarkable. On the other hand, building basic constructions are also vital for each part of the city. The skyscrapers have been really popular in the past decades especially as a sign of development country. Upper and down town of development and currently developing countries are filled with several multiple stories apartment flats or office blocks and it now has been a symbol of industrialisation. As an example, New York City in the states is a city full of skyscrapers which has known for its stunning also crowed scenery. So we can say that these buildings have their own benefits for the general view of the city. But the governments have to invest in basic need constructions such as hospitals, schools and universities. Because industrialisation comes only when people have fulfilled their basic needs. One crystal clear example is Japan which has the best living welfare for its people as well as large constructions. Countries and private section should take charge of building every range of buildings financially. To sum up, the need of hospitals and other types of accommodations are not deniable and should be invest on but the buildings, which has remarkable constructions, can count as a country’s profile of development too.
Certain
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people
believe that tall and impressive
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constructions
significantly
matter for a city. Others
however
say that funds should
be paid
for schools and hospitals
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development
. On the one hand, I
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agree
that the striking
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buildings
play a crucial role on the town’s landscape to be more remarkable.
On the other hand
,
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building
basic
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constructions
are
also
vital for each part of the city.

The skyscrapers have been
really
popular in the past decades
especially
as a
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sign
of
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development
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country
. Upper and down town of
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development
and
currently
developing
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countries
are filled
with several multiple
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stories
apartment flats or office blocks and it
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now
has been a symbol of
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industrialisation
. As an example, New York City in the states is a city full of skyscrapers which has known for its stunning
also
crowed scenery.
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So
we can say that these
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buildings
have their
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own
benefits for the general view of the city.

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the
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governments
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have to
invest in basic need
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constructions
such as hospitals, schools and universities.
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Because
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industrialisation
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comes
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only
when
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people
have fulfilled their basic needs. One crystal
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clear
example is Japan which has the best living welfare for its
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people
as well
as large
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constructions
.
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Countries
and private section should take charge of
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building
every range of
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buildings
financially
.

To sum up, the need of hospitals and other types of accommodations are not deniable and should be
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invest
on
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but
the
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buildings
, which has remarkable
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constructions
, can count as a
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country’s
profile of
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development
too.
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IELTS essay Large, impressive building and money spend on improving schools and hospitals

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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