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Large business have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. what problems does this cause? what could be done to encourage people to buy local products.

Large business have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. what problems does this cause? what could be done to encourage people to buy local products. kGyO
Rising promotion and marketing leads to development of big companies, as a consequences, people claim to buy products from big companies instead of selling from local companies. Firstly, this essay will discuss the cause of this problem, and secondly, this essay will discuss about solution to solve this issue. To open the deliberation side, there is a numerous people, who want to say that because of large business, local companies are having to face biggest loss, actually huge companies brand depends on promotion and marketing to sell their products, to see their advertisement, people attract easily and start to buy product from their agencies, as a result, local companies are unable to sell their product and they loss their local customer. Moreover they have to close their shop along with this employees has to find another job.
Rising promotion and marketing leads to development of
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big
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companies
, as
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a consequences
,
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people
claim to
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buy
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products
from
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big
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companies
instead
of selling from
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local
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companies
.
Firstly
, this essay will discuss the cause of this problem, and
secondly
, this essay will
Did you mean simply "discuss solution"? You do not need the word "about" here.
discuss about solution
to solve this issue.

To open the deliberation side, there is a numerous
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people
, who want to say that
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because
of large business,
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local
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companies
are having to face
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biggest
loss, actually huge
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companies
brand depends on promotion and marketing to sell their
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products
, to
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see
their advertisement,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
attract
easily
and
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start
to
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buy
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product
from their agencies,
as a result
,
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local
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companies
are unable to sell their
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product and
they
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loss
their
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local
customer.
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Moreover
they
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have to
close their shop along with
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this
employees
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has to
find another job.

IELTS essay Large business have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. what problems does this cause? what could be done to encourage people to buy local products.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
137 words
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