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There are people who think that it is right to admit the worse circumstances like the inadequate job or lack of money and there are people who have an optimistic view that it is better to take initiative from our side to make such circumstances better rather than sitting idly. According to my perspective, we should confront any situation and also not give up at any point in life, no matter how worse the condition is. Our priority always would be to make it better for better future of ourselves. Life is not about leading happy, there would be situations in our life where we forced to do survival jobs as well as with bad financial background. We can clearly say this is the exact situation faced almost all everyone in their daily life. If life is good with no down, there would be no fun to thrive. Even heart beat has up and down, if it goes, there surely we would die straighly. But once you have that of issues, don't sitback and complain. Confront the situation and solve the problems. If you don't give up, you would surely win at this. For example company like apple would not be succesfull if steve jobs gave it up early. Even once you are successful, you are not meant to lead successful and happy with your remaining life. You may have mental issues, family issues and last but least financial issues. We would always try to avoid anything that causes financial issues which would result in stress that eventually affect health. Everyone should keep in mind that, sucess is not sustainable at all. You may fall in the long run. But you should not give up and keep up optimisptic attitude, hardwork, determination and presmisteism. Consider the example of nokia company. It was one of sucessfull company. What happened to them? they failed cause they didn't update their technology according to the trend. In conclusion, life is full of surprises with bad and good circumstance. But that does not mean we should sit back and complain. If everyone did like that, then we would withness big companies like microsoft, apple and google. They all built this company from scartch by doing survival jobs and since they are self made, they all had poor financial background too.
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that it is right to admit the worse circumstances like the inadequate
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to take initiative from our side to
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such circumstances
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better
rather
than sitting
idly
. According to my perspective, we should confront any
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situation
and
also
not give up at any point in
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life
, no matter how worse the condition is. Our priority always would be to
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make
it
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for
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future of ourselves.

Life is not about leading happy, there would be
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situations
in our
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life
where we forced to do survival
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jobs
as well
as with
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bad
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financial
background. We can
clearly
say this is the exact
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situation
faced almost all everyone in their daily
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life
. If
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life
is
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good
with no down, there would be no fun to thrive. Even heart beat has up and down, if it goes, there
surely
we would
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straighly
.
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once you have that of
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issues
, don't
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sitback
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situation
and solve the problems. If you don't give up, you would
surely
win at this.
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company
like apple would not be
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succesfull
if steve
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jobs
gave it up early.

Even once you are successful, you are not meant to lead successful and happy with your remaining
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life
. You may have mental
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issues
, family
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issues
and last
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least
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financial
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issues
. We would always try to avoid anything that causes
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financial
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issues
which would result in
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stress
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in mind that,
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sucess
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you should not give up and
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optimisptic
attitude,
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hardwork
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nokia
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sucessfull
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. What happened to them?
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failed
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cause they
didn't update their technology according to the trend.

In conclusion
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is full of surprises with
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bad
and
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withness
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microsoft
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from
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scartch
by doing survival
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self made
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financial
background too.
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IELTS essay lack of money and inadequate job

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
385 words
5.5
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