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Lack of fresh water is becoming a global issue of increasing importance. What problems does this shortage cause? What measures could be taken to overcome these problems? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. v.2

Lack of fresh water is becoming a global issue of increasing importance. What problems does this shortage cause? What measures could be taken to overcome these problems? v. 2
Water plays an important role in everybody's life. It can be used for many household activities like cooking, bathing, drinking and washing clothes. Approximately, 71% of the earth's surface is covered with water and in that, only 1% water is suitable for drinking purpose. In the past years, there was more than sufficient water available for us, but in the present times, the problem of fresh drinking water is going on incrementing. Soon it is going to become a huge issue for all the people living on the earth. The reasons for this drastic change are many. Mostly because of the lack of interest we show towards the environment and that is why this situation is getting worse. The very first reason of water scarcity is the waste material, produce by the manufacturing industries, going into water bodies. One clear example is, soap manufacturing industries. These industries, they use lots of chemicals to produce a single bar of soap. For the preparation of soap bars, the chemicals went through so many processes and then after that extra chemical discharge into small rivers or lakes. Due to that water gets polluted and is not fit for drinking purposes. The second reason is over usage of water in agriculture purposes. For instance, the farmer wants to water their farms so he opens the tap, but forgets to turn it off because of that lot of water gets wasted. So, there are many more reasons due to which there is a shortage of fresh water. To prevent that, the most important solution is, to reuse the already used water in harvesting purposes. By doing that, we can save half of the drinking water. In addition to that, we can find new ways of purifying sea water by setting up large purification plants. Moreover, we can set up rainwater harvesting techniques. To conclude that, we need to save our precious resource of life that is, "water good for drinking purposes". Because if we will not start saving it as soon as possible then that day is not far when there is no water left on earth and due to that creature start to die.
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Water
plays an
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important
role in everybody's life. It can be
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used
for
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many
household activities like cooking, bathing,
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drinking
and washing clothes. Approximately, 71% of the earth's surface
is covered
with
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water
and in that,
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only
1%
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water
is suitable for
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drinking
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purpose
. In the past years, there was more than sufficient
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water
available for us,
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but
in the present times, the problem of fresh
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drinking
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water
is going on incrementing.
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Soon
it is going to become a huge issue for all the
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people
living on the earth. The
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reasons
for this drastic
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change
are
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.
Mostly
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because
of the lack of interest we
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show
towards the environment and
that is
why this situation is getting worse.

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first
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reason
of
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water
scarcity is the waste material, produce by the manufacturing industries, going into
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water
bodies. One
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clear
example is, soap manufacturing industries. These industries, they
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use
lots of chemicals to produce a single bar of soap. For the preparation of soap bars, the chemicals went through
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so
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many
processes and then after that extra chemical discharge into
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small
rivers or lakes. Due to that
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water
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gets
polluted and is not fit for
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drinking
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purposes
. The second
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reason
is over usage of
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water
in agriculture
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purposes
.
For instance
, the farmer wants to
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water
their farms
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so
he opens the tap,
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but
forgets to turn it off
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because
of that lot of
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water
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gets
wasted.

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, there are
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more
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reasons
due to which there is a shortage of fresh
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water
. To
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prevent
that, the most
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important
solution is, to reuse the already
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used
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water
in harvesting purposes.

By doing that, we can save half of the
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drinking
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water
.
In addition
to that, we can find new ways of purifying sea
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water
by setting up large purification plants.
Moreover
, we can set up rainwater harvesting techniques.

To conclude
that, we need to save our precious resource of life
that is
,
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water
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good
for
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drinking
purposes
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"
.
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if we will not
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start
saving it as
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soon
as possible
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then
that day is not far when there is no
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water
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left
on earth and due to that creature
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8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Lack of fresh water is becoming a global issue of increasing importance. What problems does this shortage cause? What measures could be taken to overcome these problems? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
360 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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