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Knowledge could be obtained from many sources like book or by real life experiences. Both of them have a considerable amount of advantages. v.2

Knowledge could be obtained from many sources like book or by real life experiences. Both of them have a considerable amount of advantages. v. 2
If you look into book knowledge you would probably gather information which would make you a professional in your career but it would not make yourself aware of your daily life. You would be studying personalities in your books who would be nowhere related to your current life. For example you would study about Karl Marx, Marco Polo, Gandhi etc whom you would never meet. But after a good analysis of their life, it could actually help a person not to repeat the same mistakes which they did and would guide us to the path of success. On the other side, practical knowledge helps the person to inculcate useful information. I think that one learns better by doing. Failures are the good milestones for success. New things can' t be merely attained without practical knowledge. In conclusion I will say that an education which is embedded with book education along with the practical value becomes a meaningful one.
If you look into book knowledge you would
probably
gather information which would
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make
you a professional in your career
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but
it would not
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make
yourself aware of your daily life. You would be studying personalities in your books who would be nowhere related to your
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current
life. For
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example you
would study about Karl Marx, Marco Polo, Gandhi etc whom you would never
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meet
.
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But
after a
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good
analysis of their life, it could actually
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
a person not to repeat the same mistakes which they did and would guide us to the path of success.

On the other side, practical knowledge
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
the person to inculcate useful information. I
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think
that one learns better by doing. Failures are the
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good
milestones for success. New things
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can&
#039; t be
merely
attained without practical knowledge.

In
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conclusion I
will say that an education which
is embedded
with book education along with the practical value becomes a meaningful one.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Knowledge could be obtained from many sources like book or by real life experiences. Both of them have a considerable amount of advantages. v. 2

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
158 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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