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Due to the hectic schedule of working life, people are busy in their professional life, hence they do not have much time for relaxation. In such situation, music brings break to their lives. Moreover, number of citizens opine that, it connects different traditions and ages together. I agree with the given statement with larger extent. This essay will describe a number of reasons for that. To begin with, music is loved by everyone, either child or old age. Firstly, different cultures have their different traditional songs. Such as, garba songs are famous for Gujarati people, bhangda songs for panjabi. Even if, this songs are from different traditions, everyone like to listen it. Secondly, people can know eachother's tradition, and celebrate various fastivals, which brings people together. Moreover, it is liked by international level too. For instance, nowadays, various hindi songs are popular in foreign countries, while english songs in india. Further, one can sooth his mind with the help of music. Additionally, it can prevent our relations. In particular, if wife get angry on his husband, than husband can brings smile of her face when he sing the song for her. Furthermore, young ones like to listen cartoon songs. To add, youngsters can get together, and enjoy the birth day party with songs. Hence, music is one of the key for happiness and relaxation. To conclude, the music can brings people together of different religions. Also, music is enjoyed by each age of people, so music is the good way to keep people together.
Due to the hectic schedule of working life,
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people
are busy in their professional life,
hence
they do not have much time for relaxation. In such situation,
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music
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brings
break to their
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lives
.
Moreover
, number of citizens opine that, it connects
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different
traditions and ages together. I
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agree
with the
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given
statement with larger extent. This essay will
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a number of reasons for that.

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begin
with,
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music
is
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loved
by everyone, either child or
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old
age.
Firstly
,
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different
cultures have their
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different
traditional songs. Such as,
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garba
songs are
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famous
for Gujarati
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people
,
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bhangda
songs for
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panjabi
. Even if,
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this
songs are from
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different
traditions, everyone like to listen it.
Secondly
,
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people
can know
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eachother
's tradition, and celebrate various
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fastivals
, which
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brings
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people
together.
Moreover
, it
is liked
by international level too.
For instance
, nowadays, various
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hindi
songs are popular in foreign countries, while
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english
songs in
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india
.

Further
, one can sooth his mind with the
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help
of
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music
.
Additionally
, it can
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prevent
our relations.
In particular
, if wife
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get
angry on his husband, than husband can
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brings
smile of her face when he
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sing
the song for her.
Furthermore
, young ones like to listen cartoon songs. To
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add
, youngsters can
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get
together, and enjoy the birth day party with songs.
Hence
,
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music
is one of the key for happiness and relaxation.
To conclude
, the
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music
can
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brings
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people
together of
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different
religions.
Also
,
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music
is enjoyed
by each age of
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people
,
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so
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music
is the
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good
way to
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keep
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people
together.
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IELTS essay Jksidjjdd djkdidie dkdodkjd dkdkkdks dkdiosie dkdodjnd ejeidj djdiei eeidie djdkek ddjekdb dejodbeje djdjjdbe ddjejhdbehdbe dkeiuwiw didi d dkdodndkoe dndkfnkskdbdkdjnc

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
254 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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