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It’s too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. Thus money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

It’s too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. Thus money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. v. 1
Most societies have a department which is supposed to observe and take care of old buildings and try to sustain them and do not let them to be ruined. However, there is a debate that is that a way of wasting fund to spend money on those buildings or investing cash is an essential way to preserve a visual part of our culture. As it was mentioned above, there are two points of view, an aspect believes that by growing population and in Order to improving and raising the life quality, all the budgets of researching and developing of urbanization should be spent on building new constructions. So, more investing check leads to achieve more modern city. In this point of view, not only saving old cultural or traditional buildings are not vital, although they believe demolishing them and building new ones is the only way to make a progress. On the other hand, there is another group who believes that taking after of an old building is not just Maintaining a building, also it plays an impressive role to survive a culture and civilization. So, our next generation can see how our ancestors were thinking or what was their architecture methods, instead of just reading about that in books. It is considerable that a major part of people believe in the necessity of sustaining those buildings because our children have the right to see these fascinating places as we are able to see. Altogether, trying to save by repairing them, if they are showing a culture or an old method of architecture is necessary, since we must let our next generation be aware of our ancient history and this old building have a strong impact on this awareness, even though improving a society is achieved by making a modern country.
Most societies have a department which
is supposed
to observe and take care of
old
buildings
and try to sustain them and do not
let
them to
be ruined
.
However
, there is a debate
that is
that a way of wasting fund to spend money on those
buildings
or investing cash is an essential way to preserve a visual part of our culture.

As it
was mentioned
above, there are two points of view, an aspect
believes
that by growing population and in

Order to
improving
and raising the life quality, all the budgets of researching and developing of urbanization should
be spent
on
building
new constructions.
So
, more investing
check
leads to achieve more modern city. In this point of view, not
only
saving
old
cultural or traditional
buildings
are not vital, although they
believe
demolishing them and
building
new ones is the
only
way to
make
a progress
.

On the other hand
, there is another group who
believes
that taking after of an
old
building
is not
just


Maintaining a
building
,
also
it plays an impressive role to survive a culture and civilization.
So
, our
next
generation can
see
how our ancestors were thinking or what was their architecture methods,
instead
of
just
reading about that in books. It is considerable that a major part of
people
believe
in the necessity of sustaining those
buildings
because
our children have the right to
see
these fascinating places as we are able to
see
.

Altogether, trying to save by repairing them, if they are showing a culture or an
old
method of architecture is necessary, since we
must
let
our
next
generation be aware of our ancient history and this
old
building
have a strong impact on this awareness,
even though
improving a society
is achieved
by making a modern country.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay It’s too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. Thus money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
301 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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