Every person is born with different skills. It is generally believed that few people are born with some talents while others claim that it is possible to train anyone to become a well known musician or a famous sports personality. It is true that inherited abilities play a great role, however in my opinion strong determinations and hard work are the key factors to make any child excel in such fields. (72)
On the one hand, it is widely thought that some people have inborn talents in various fields. They may have acquired it genetically or might have been fortunate enough to be blessed with those flairs by birth without any genetic predisposition. For instance, it is seen that certain children display the taste in music or sports at a very tender age which proves their inborn instinct. On the contrary, some others fail to exhibit such traits. (76)
On the other hand, it is believed that any kid can be trained to become good in the field of music or sports. This is because hard work and dedication can make anything possible, asserting the thought that a child can be taught to be skilful in sports or music. When strong willpower and dedication are coupled with hard work and training from experts, it will eventually pave way for mastering anything. The growing number of academies which provide training in sports and music is an indication of how children can be supported by parents and well-wishers to develop such skills. (101)
In my opinion, irrespective of whether a person is born with talent or not, intense desire and hard work can make any person better in sports or music. (28)
Every person
is born
with
different
skills
. It is
generally
believed that few
people
are born
with
some
talents while others claim that it is possible to train anyone to become a well known musician or a
famous
sports
personality. It is true that inherited abilities play a great role,
however
in my opinion strong determinations and
hard
work
are the key factors to
make
any child excel in such fields. (72)
On the one hand, it is
widely
thought
that
some
people
have inborn talents in various fields. They may have acquired it
genetically
or might have been fortunate
enough
to
be blessed
with those flairs by birth without any genetic predisposition.
For instance
, it is
seen
that certain children display the taste in
music
or
sports
at a
very
tender age which proves their inborn instinct.
On the contrary
,
some
others fail to exhibit such traits. (76)
On the other hand
, it
is believed
that any kid can
be trained
to become
good
in the field of
music
or
sports
. This is
because
hard
work
and dedication can
make
anything possible, asserting the
thought
that a child can
be taught
to be
skilful
in
sports
or
music
. When strong willpower and dedication
are coupled
with
hard
work
and training from experts, it will
eventually
pave way for mastering anything. The growing number of academies which provide training in
sports
and
music
is an indication of how children can
be supported
by parents and well-wishers to develop such
skills
. (101)
In my opinion, irrespective of whether a person
is born
with talent or not, intense desire and
hard
work
can
make
any person better in
sports
or
music
. (28)
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes