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It's better to live in the City than to live in the Countryside. Do you agree or disagree?

It's better to live in the City than to live in the Countryside. E3Bmr
The question of whether or not live in urban areas is better than in rural ones has been receiving a great deal of public attention. While I agree that living in the city brings several advantages, I also believe there are significant disadvantages which city dwellers can have. On the one hand, I agree that city life is attractive as it offers opportunities that can change one’s life, especially the young’s. First and foremost, cities are more likely to offer greater employment possibilities. In fact, traditional activities like farming need fewer workers nowadays thanks to the development of machines and technology. That is why people in the countryside, especially younger workers, tend to move to cities searching for job opportunities. Moreover, a higher standard of living with educational and medical facilities that help people better themselves and guarantee that brighter prospects can be found in urban areas. Nevertheless, I also think that residents in cities have to face different problems that would make their life uncomfortable and stressful. Firstly, traffic congestion and pollution are one of the most common issues people usually experience in the city. In fact, the number of commuters and private vehicles they use tends to increase since the population in most cities is growing. This means that the traffic jam at peak hours when people going to and from work is unavoidable and the exhaust fumes released will pollute the environment, which leads to frustration while traveling and unhealthy life of citizens. Secondly, homelessness and poverty are easily seen in cities since the cost of living is often higher than in rural areas and not all people in cities manage to find work. The housing rent is usually much more expensive and since it is populous, there is always a lack of housing for people. If the situation continues and it is not be solved immediately, the crime rate will increase in urban areas, which will affect people’s safety In conclusion, to a certain extent, I agree that living in a city is advantageous because of the chances to help people change their life. However, I also think that it is detrimental and unhealthy due to some problems related to overpopulation.
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The question of whether
or not
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live
in urban areas is better than in rural
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ones
has been receiving a great deal of public attention. While I
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agree
that
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living
in the city brings several advantages, I
also
believe there are significant disadvantages which city dwellers can have.

On the one hand, I
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agree
that city
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life
is attractive as it offers opportunities that can
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change
one’s
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life
,
especially
the young’s.
First
and foremost,
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cities
are more likely to offer greater employment possibilities. In fact, traditional activities like farming need fewer workers nowadays thanks to the development of machines and technology.
That is
why
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people
in the countryside,
especially
younger workers, tend to
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move
to
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cities
searching for job opportunities.
Moreover
, a higher standard of
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living
with educational and medical facilities that
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help
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people
better themselves and guarantee that brighter prospects can
be found
in urban areas.

Nevertheless
, I
also
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think
that residents in
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cities
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have to
face
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different
problems that would
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their
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life
uncomfortable and stressful.
Firstly
, traffic congestion and pollution are one of the most common issues
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people
usually
experience in the city. In fact, the number of commuters and private vehicles they
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use
tends to increase since the population in most
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cities
is growing. This means that the traffic jam at peak hours when
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people
going to and from work is unavoidable and the exhaust fumes released will pollute the environment, which leads to frustration while traveling and unhealthy
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life
of citizens.
Secondly
, homelessness and poverty are
easily
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seen
in
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cities
since the cost of
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living
is
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often
higher than in rural areas and not all
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people
in
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cities
manage to find work. The housing rent is
usually
much more expensive and since it is populous, there is always a lack of housing for
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people
. If the situation continues and it is not
be solved
immediately, the crime rate will increase in urban areas, which will affect
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people’s
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safety


In conclusion
, to a certain extent, I
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agree
that
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living
in a city is advantageous
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because
of the chances to
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help
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people
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change
their
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life
.
However
, I
also
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that it is detrimental and unhealthy due to
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problems related to overpopulation.
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IELTS essay It's better to live in the City than to live in the Countryside.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
365 words
6.0
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