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1794 some people say that food in an expensive restaurant is always better than food in a cheap restaurant - would you agree? v.1

1794 some people say that food in an expensive restaurant is always better than food in a cheap restaurant - would you agree? v. 1
There is no doubt that news reading has become increasingly popular over the past few years. Many people believe that while the internet has become a major source of news, newspapers will always be the best place to know what is happening around the world. This essay will discuss why I disagree with this viewpoint. Firstly, most newspaper organizations are developing and maintaining electronic news websites in order to reach more and more people. Since most people are maintaining electronic devices where they can find hundreds of online resources to know what is happening around them, many of them have lost interest in reading newspapers. For example, in India, many newspaper publishers have stopped publishing newspapers as their business went down because of advanced technology. In contrast, even though some critics argue that many old people still depend upon newspapers as they are not aware of online news, I believe online news readers outnumbered these elderly population. Moreover, more and more readers are concern about the price of the newspaper. This is because nowadays the internet connection cost is cheaper than many newspapers in many countries. For example, in Japan, the internet connection price is 15 dollars per month, while the newspaper cost is around 20 dollars a month. While some people argue that newspaper companies offer annual discounts, I think the internet assists us in many ways besides reading online news. In conclusion, I disagree with the opinion that newspapers will still be the best place to find the news even though more and more users prefer to read the news online because of online news websites and newspapers being expensive than the internet. Therefore, I suggest newspaper companies to stop their publications and put more focus on developing online newspapers.
There is no doubt that
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news
reading has become
increasingly
popular over the past few years.
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Many
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people
believe that while the internet has become a major source of
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news
,
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newspapers
will always be the best place to know what is happening around the world. This essay will discuss why I disagree with this viewpoint.

Firstly
, most
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newspaper
organizations are developing and maintaining electronic
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news
websites in order to reach more and more
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people
. Since most
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people
are maintaining electronic devices where they can find hundreds of
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online
resources to know what is happening around them,
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many
of them have lost interest in reading
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newspapers
.
For example
, in India,
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many
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newspaper
publishers have
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stopped
publishing
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newspapers
as their business went down
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because
of advanced technology.
In contrast
,
even though
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some
critics argue that
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many
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old
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people
still
depend upon
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newspapers
as they are not aware of
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online
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news
, I believe
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online
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news
readers outnumbered these elderly population.

Moreover
, more and more readers are concern about the price of the
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newspaper
. This is
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because
nowadays the internet connection cost is cheaper than
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many
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newspapers
in
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many
countries.
For example
, in Japan, the internet connection price is 15 dollars per month, while the
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newspaper
cost is around 20 dollars a month. While
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some
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people
argue that
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newspaper
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companies
offer annual discounts, I
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think
the internet assists us in
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many
ways
besides
reading
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online
news.

In conclusion
, I disagree with the opinion that
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newspapers
will
still
be the best place to find the
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news
even though
more and more users prefer to read the
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news
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online
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because
of
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online
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news
websites and
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newspapers
being expensive than the internet.
Therefore
, I suggest
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newspaper
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companies
to
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stop
their publications and put more focus on developing
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online
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newspapers
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay 1794 some people say that food in an expensive restaurant is always better than food in a cheap restaurant - would you agree? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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