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It is widely acknowledged that tourism presents an important source of profits in many parts of the world

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It is widely acknowledged that tourism presents an important source of profits in many parts of the world. On the other hand, opinions are divided on whether tourism is not being well handled, it can also be a source of issues. Personally, I am the latter school of thought for several reasons. Granted, on the business level, we have no doubt to admit that tourism significantly contributes to the local’s living standard. To begin with, they provide a huge amount of revenue for the local community by selling handicrafts and souvenirs. Due to the demand for goods and services, the residents can also live on by the profits and also provides employment opportunities. Furthermore, realizing the potential benefits, many corporations would likely invest their money to build resorts, hotels, and restaurants surrounding these areas. As a ramifications, it supports the rise in income and the development of a nation which contributes to improving the standard of living for local people. While this trend benefits individuals and society alike in the short term, it has negative long term repercussions for the planet as a whole. The drawbacks of tourism are indeed in plain sight. From a practical viewpoint, this trend is contributing to the depletion of natural resources and pollution. In my observation, it is easy to see that many tourist destinations have been disfigured by visitors. Tourist sites could be polluted because of a great deal of garbage produced and thrown away by tourists. Moreover, some of them are still cutting tree branches to make tents or fuel their bond fires. Not only that, the business always puts the financial benefit into a priority in a highly competitive way so they would extend and upgrade infrastructures such as roads, hotels, and other facilities in order to expand their business resulting in deeply affecting natural ecosystems and ruins the pristine scenery. In conclusion, I believe that the disadvantages of tourism oustrip the benifits. However, with some tact and diplomacy, these issues can usually be overcome. For example, some sacred places should have tables of rules to help tourists recognise the mistakes they have made. Besides, it is important for tourists to have a sense of awareness such that instead of trying to touch ancient artefacts they can admire them with their bare eyes or take pictures of them, or instead of dumping trash everywhere they still can hold on it and find the trash can, it just a small details but could dealing with the escalating pollution rate. However the holidaymaker ability to both have fun and protect the environment in places where they travel
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widely
acknowledged that
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tourism
presents an
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important
source of profits in
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many
parts of the world.
On the other hand
, opinions
are divided
on whether
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tourism
is not being well handled, it can
also
be a source of issues.
Personally
, I am the latter school of
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thought
for several reasons.

Granted, on the business level, we have no doubt to admit that
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tourism
significantly
contributes to the local’s living standard. To
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begin
with, they provide a huge amount of revenue for the local community by selling handicrafts and souvenirs. Due to the demand for
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goods
and services, the residents can
also
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live
on by the profits and
also
provides employment opportunities.
Furthermore
, realizing the potential benefits,
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many
corporations would likely invest their money to build resorts, hotels, and restaurants surrounding these areas. As
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a ramifications
, it supports the rise in income and the development of a nation which contributes to improving the standard of living for local
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people
.

While this trend benefits individuals and society alike in the short term, it has
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negative
long term repercussions for the planet as a whole. The drawbacks of
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tourism
are
indeed
in plain sight. From a practical viewpoint, this trend is contributing to the depletion of natural resources and pollution. In my observation, it is easy to
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see
that
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many
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tourist
destinations have
been disfigured
by visitors.
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Tourist
sites could
be polluted
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because
of a great deal of garbage produced and thrown away by
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tourists
.
Moreover
,
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some
of them are
still
cutting tree branches to
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make
tents or fuel their bond fires. Not
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only
that, the business always puts the financial benefit into a priority in a
highly
competitive way
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so
they would extend and upgrade infrastructures such as roads, hotels, and other facilities in order to expand their business resulting in
deeply
affecting natural ecosystems and ruins the pristine scenery.

In conclusion
, I believe that the disadvantages of
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tourism
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the
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benifits
.
However
, with
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some
tact and diplomacy, these issues can
usually
be overcome
.
For example
,
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some
sacred places should have tables of
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rules
to
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help
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tourists
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recognise
the mistakes they have made.
Besides
, it is
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important
for
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tourists
to have a sense of awareness such that
instead
of trying to touch ancient
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artefacts
they can admire them with their bare eyes or take pictures of them, or
instead
of dumping trash everywhere they
still
can hold on it and find the trash can, it
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just
a
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small
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details
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could
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dealing
with the escalating pollution rate.
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However
the holidaymaker ability to both have fun and protect the environment in places where they
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travel
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IELTS essay It is widely acknowledged that tourism presents an important source of profits in many parts of the world

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