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It is universally accepted that international tourism has already become popular these days and it brought enormous benefits to lots of towns and countries.

It is universally accepted that international tourism has already become popular these days and it brought enormous benefits to lots of towns and countries. 5k67P
It is universally accepted that international tourism has already become popular these days and it brought enormous benefits to lots of towns and countries. In my perspective, this trend would create certain drawbacks but it has more positive impacts compared to negative ones. This essay will discuss why the disadvantages do not outweigh the advantages. On the other hand, it is clear that International tourism would create several disadvantages. One evident strength is that the tourism industry would put more pressure on natural resources like oil, water, … so it can cause more pollution and wastage. Also, the local environment would be distracted by more and more people in year by year come to these famous place so local people are afraid that they would destroy beautiful landscape there like littering or destroying the plants, animals, . . Consequently, the increase in tourism affects not only the surroundings but also local people too, because tourism may affect traditional jobs and skills. Tourism development forces people to work in services so some traditional occupations may die out. On the other hand, I argue that the advantages of tourism development would prove to be more important. Many people believe that traveling around the world is a means of education because you can widen your knowledge by learning new things from the local people, the culture, … there. In addition, tourism is one of the major sources of income in some countries. It creates a lot of job opportunities for local people as some of them could become tour guides or can run small businesses. Last but not least, it also attracts investors in building resorts and hotels in the surrounding areas. The development of these places will absorb many employments not only from the local area but from other cities and countries as well. In conclusion, tourism is very important to any region for its development. There are minus points to natural resources, local environment, and traditional occupations. However, it seems to me that its advantages would be more important regarding the income of some countries, means of education attract investors in a large project.
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that international
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has already become popular these days and it brought enormous benefits to lots of towns and
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countries
. In my perspective, this trend would create certain drawbacks
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it has more
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impacts compared to
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ones. This essay will discuss why the disadvantages do not outweigh the advantages.

On the other hand
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clear
that International
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tourism
would create several disadvantages. One evident strength is that the
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tourism
industry would put more pressure on natural resources like oil, water, …
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so
it can cause more pollution and wastage.
Also
, the
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local
environment would
be distracted
by more and more
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people
in year by year
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come
to these
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famous
place
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so
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local
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people
are afraid that they would
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destroy
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beautiful
landscape there like littering or destroying the plants, animals
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Consequently
, the increase in
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affects not
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only
the surroundings
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also
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local
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people
too,
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because
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tourism
may affect traditional jobs and
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skills
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forces
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people
to work in services
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so
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traditional occupations may
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out.

On the other hand
, I argue that the advantages of
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development
would prove to be more
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important
.
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Many
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people
believe that traveling around the world is a means of education
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because
you can widen your knowledge by learning new things from the
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local
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people
, the culture, … there.
In addition
,
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is one of the major sources of income in
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some
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countries
. It creates
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a lot of
job opportunities for
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local
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people
as
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some
of them could become tour guides or can run
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small
businesses. Last
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not least, it
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of these places will absorb
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many
employments not
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from the
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local
area
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from other cities and
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as well
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In conclusion
,
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is
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important
to any region for its
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development
. There are minus points to natural resources,
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local
environment, and traditional occupations.

However
, it seems to me that its advantages would be more
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important
regarding the income of
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some
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countries
, means of education attract investors in a large project.
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IELTS essay It is universally accepted that international tourism has already become popular these days and it brought enormous benefits to lots of towns and countries.

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