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It is true to say that ,in recent times some people want to get emptiness year among high school and university to work and to travel . However , there are pros and cons of doing this. I am of the opinion that the benefits of contacting virtually outweigh any possible drawbacks.

It is true to say that, in recent times some people want to get emptiness year among high school and university to work and to travel. However, there are pros and cons of doing this. I am of the opinion that the benefits of contacting virtually outweigh any possible drawbacks. LLAKG
On the one hand, there are a number of benefits of travel between university and high school and to get a boss for work. Firstly if peoplebwork with labour, they will get more salary. Secondly others man will see world with adventure because they will go to different countries worldwide, and return with events of worldwide importance. Thirdly there will be an exchange of communication between people as they come to work in the process of work. Finally, there will be more pensions for those who work because thay will be added to the pension every year. On the one hand, there are a number of drawbacks of getting among high scool and university. Firstly, there will not be know by heart got knowledge from high school and lost time collecting for enough science to universiy. Explain that if they spends a year on different things, a lot of information can be forgotten in that year. Secondly, it is difficult to study at the university because it is time to start a family because many responsibilities are imposed. Explain that it is difficult to study and take care of the family.
On the one hand, there are a number of benefits of travel between university and high school and to
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get
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work
.
Firstly
if
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peoplebwork
with
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labour
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get
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Secondly
others
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man
will
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see
world with adventure
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because
they will go to
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different
countries worldwide, and return with
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events
of worldwide importance.
Thirdly
there will be an exchange of communication between
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people
as they
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come
to
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work
in the process of
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work
.
Finally
, there will be more pensions for those who
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work
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because
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thay
will be
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added
to the pension every year. On the one hand, there are a number of drawbacks of getting among
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high scool
and university.
Firstly
, there will not be
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know
by heart
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got
knowledge from high school and lost time collecting for
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enough
science to
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universiy
.
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Explain
that if they
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spends
a year on
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different
things,
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a lot of
information can
be forgotten
in that year.
Secondly
, it is difficult to study at the university
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because
it is time to
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start
a family
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because
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many
responsibilities
are imposed
.
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Explain
that it is difficult to study and take care of the family.
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IELTS essay It is true to say that, in recent times some people want to get emptiness year among high school and university to work and to travel. However, there are pros and cons of doing this. I am of the opinion that the benefits of contacting virtually outweigh any possible drawbacks.

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