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It is true that several people think that we should spend money on studying another planet to live in the future like Mars. However, I completely disagree with this idea.

It is true that several people think that we should spend money on studying another planet to live in the future like Mars. However, I completely disagree with this idea. nxJKg
There are a variety of reasons why people should spend money on environmental protection organizations instead of researching other planets. One reason is that the research cost is not cheap. If the government spends too much money on these studies for a long time, it will waste taxpayers' money. Furthermore, donation for environmental protection groups is cheaper and it also helps the Earth better. As UNEP is an example, people can donate to this group to improve our environment and reduce pollution throughout the world, so that it could maintain life on Earth for a long time. Apart from these ways, we should reduce the carbon footprint by using public transports or some renewable energy to limit fossil fuels. It will bring many benefits for us rather than wasting a great deal of money on the study for a long period. Secondly, national and local authorities should raise people’s awareness about environmental protection, which could help people worldwide know more about the serious problem currently. For instance, people can replace their individual transports with public transport to protect the environment or use wind energy and solar energy to reduce electric energy. These works can limit the carbon-dioxide emissions and these also reduce climate change. In conclusion, people can spend their money on many devices and organizations which relate to the environment to help Earth better instead of expenditure on this research without hope.
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people
should spend
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money
on environmental protection organizations
instead
of researching other planets. One reason is that the research cost is not
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cheap
. If the
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government
spends too much
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money
on these studies for a long time, it will waste taxpayers'
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money
.
Furthermore
, donation for environmental protection groups is cheaper and it
also
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helps
the Earth better. As
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UNEP
is an example,
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people
can donate to this group to
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improve
our environment and
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reduce
pollution throughout the world,
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so
that it could maintain life on Earth for a long time.

Apart from these ways, we should
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reduce
the carbon footprint by using public transports or
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some
renewable
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energy
to limit fossil fuels. It will bring
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many
benefits for us
rather
than wasting a great deal of
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money
on the study for a long period.
Secondly
, national and local authorities should raise
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people’s
awareness about environmental protection, which could
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help
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people
worldwide know more about the serious problem
currently
.
For instance
,
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people
can replace their individual transports with public transport to protect the environment or
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use
wind
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energy
and solar
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energy
to
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reduce
electric
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energy
. These works can limit the carbon-dioxide emissions and these
also
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reduce
climate
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change
.

In conclusion
,
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people
can spend their
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money
on
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many
devices and organizations which relate to the environment to
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help
Earth better
instead
of expenditure on this research without hope.
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IELTS essay It is true that several people think that we should spend money on studying another planet to live in the future like Mars. However, I completely disagree with this idea.

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3 paragraphs
233 words
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