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It is true that, currently, more and more professionals such as physicians and educators are migrating from their own underdeveloped country to reside and labour in developed countries.

It is true that, currently, more and more professionals such as physicians and educators are migrating from their own underdeveloped country to reside and labour in developed countries. In this essay, I will suggest the major problems associated with this situation are the shortage of skills and detrimental for the economy of their native country and then submit to increasing the salary and offering better working condition to them. To begin with, the several drawbacks caused by brain drain can be anticipated. First and foremost, it could negatively affect on economy of the poorer nations. In other words, in modern society, expert teachers play the significant role. Owing to this, if they leave their own country, schools may not be able to provide the students with efficient lessons, which will detrimental on the future growth of country's e economy. Another problem would be lack of proficient. This means that, due to the scarce of professionals such as doctors and teachers in poorer nations, the citizens couldn't utilize basic facilitys such as medical and educational. As a consequence, government will need to bring medical equipments and experienced from foreign countries for millions of dollars. However, in order to address these problems, government should offer them a better working environment, this can be done by allocating additional budget for the improvement of their living standards. For example, providing them with adequate working space and modern equipments may prevent the migration of skilled labourers. Moreover, government can make the salary of professionals equivalent with developed countries. In conclusion, although, the migration leads to decrease in the number of proficient and affect the economies growth. Nevertheless, In order to retain these talents and prevent countries from such kind of problems, government should offer a pleasureable working condition and pay higher salary for them.
It is true that,
currently
, more and more professionals such as physicians and educators are migrating from their
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own
underdeveloped
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country
to reside and
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labour
in developed
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countries
. In this essay, I will suggest the major
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problems
associated with this situation are the shortage of
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skills
and detrimental for the
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economy
of their native
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country
and then submit to increasing the salary and offering better
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working
condition to them.

To
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begin
with, the several drawbacks caused by brain drain can
be anticipated
.
First
and foremost, it could
negatively
affect on
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economy
of the poorer nations.
In other words
, in modern society, expert teachers play the significant role. Owing to this, if they
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leave
their
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own
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country
, schools may not be able to provide the students with efficient lessons, which will detrimental on the future growth of country's e
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economy
. Another
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problem
would be lack of proficient. This means that, due to the
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scarce
of professionals such as doctors and teachers in poorer nations, the citizens couldn't utilize basic
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facilitys
such as medical and educational. As a consequence,
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government
will need to bring medical equipments and experienced from foreign
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countries
for millions of dollars.

However
, in order to address these
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problems
,
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government
should offer them a better
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working
environment, this can
be done
by allocating additional budget for the improvement of their living standards.
For example
, providing them with adequate
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working
space and modern equipments may
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prevent
the migration of skilled
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labourers
.
Moreover
,
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government
can
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make
the salary of professionals equivalent with
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developed countries
.

In conclusion
, although, the migration leads to decrease in the number of proficient and affect the
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economies
growth.
Nevertheless
, In order to retain these talents and
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prevent
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countries
from such kind of
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problems
,
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government
should offer a
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pleasureable
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working
condition and pay higher salary for them.
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IELTS essay It is true that, currently, more and more professionals such as physicians and educators are migrating from their own underdeveloped country to reside and labour in developed countries.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6.0
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