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•It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the country side. Discuss both sides and give your opinion v.3

•It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the country side. 3
Many people think that residing in a developed city is a better option while others think that the villages are the best place for living to have a good quality of life. This essay will discuss why living in a city is the best option, but why villages are better to live a healthy lifestyle. On the one hand, developed cities are now the foremost choice of residence by the people. National and International companies are keen to work in the city. As a result, the demand for trained skilled personnel is increasing in these cities which results in migrating people from rural to urban areas to get a job. For instance, a company name Airtel which has a head office in Mumbai advertises the requirement of 1500 staff in the call center. On the other hand, living a healthy life is too important than any other thing. Some people are moving from urban to rural areas because these areas are free from pollution. Besides, the cost of living is also much lesser. For instance, Delhi, the national capital of India is now facing the most respiratory problems because of pollution in comparison to the villages which are some distance away from Delhi and are somewhat free from these disorders. Finally, In my opinion, whether living in a metropolis or a countryside depends upon person to person. Take, for example, to choose a good career; it is better to live in a city. In contrast, villages are best as a residential place to live a healthy lifestyle because villages are not much polluted as cities. In conclusion, cities and remotes areas are the choice depends upon the need of people. This essay discussed how living in developed cities is a better option for seeking job and career growth and how villages are proved to be a good residential place because of lesser pollution.
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that residing in a developed city is a
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better
option while others
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that the
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are the best place for
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to have a
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quality of life. This essay will discuss why
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living
in a city is the best option,
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why
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villages
are
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to
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a healthy lifestyle.

On the one hand, developed
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cities
are
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now
the foremost choice of residence by the
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people
. National and International
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companies
are keen to work in the city.
As a result
, the demand for trained skilled personnel is increasing in these
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cities
which results in migrating
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people
from rural to urban
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areas
to
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get
a job.
For instance
, a
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company
name Airtel which has a head office in Mumbai advertises the requirement of 1500 staff in the call center.

On the other hand
,
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living
a healthy life is too
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important
than any other thing.
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are moving from urban to rural
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these
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are free from pollution.
Besides
, the cost of
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living
is
also
much lesser.
For instance
, Delhi, the national capital of India is
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now
facing the most respiratory problems
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because
of pollution
in comparison
to the
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villages
which are
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distance away from Delhi and are somewhat free from these disorders.

Finally
, In my opinion, whether
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living
in a metropolis or a countryside depends upon person to person. Take,
for example
, to choose a
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good
career; it is
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better
to
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live
in a city.
In contrast
,
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villages
are best as a residential place to
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live
a healthy lifestyle
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because
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villages
are not much polluted as cities.

In conclusion
,
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cities
and remotes
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areas
are the choice depends upon the need of
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people
. This essay discussed how
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living
in developed
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cities
is a
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better
option for seeking job and career growth and how
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villages
are proved
to be a
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good
residential place
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because
of lesser pollution.
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29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay •It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the country side. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
313 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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