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It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the country side. Discuss both sides and give your opinion v.1

It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the country side. 1
Many masses think that residing in urban areas is a better choice while others think that the suburbs are the topmost locality to have a good quality of life. This essay will discuss why living in a capital is a better option, but why villages are the better for a healthy lifestyle. Developed cities are now the foremost choice of residence by the people. National and International companies are keen to work in a city because of high literacy rate. As a result, the demand for trained skilled personnel is increasing in these metropolitan areas and results in migrating of individuals from undeveloped to developed areas in search of jobs. For instance, a company name Airtel, which has a head office in Mumbai advertises the requirement of 1500 staff in the call centre. However, living a healthy life is too important than any other thing. Some pupils are moving from towns to rural zones because these areas are free from pollution. Besides, the cost of living is much lesser. For instance, Delhi, the national capital of India is now facing the most respiratory problems because of pollution in comparison to the regions which are some distance away from Delhi and are somewhat free from these disorders. Finally, In my opinion, whether living in a metropolis or a countryside, depends upon person to person. Take, for instance, to choose a good career; it is better to live in a downtown. In contrast, villages are best as a residential place to live a hale lifestyle because of the low-level of tainting. In conclusion, cities and remote areas are the choice depends upon the need of persons. This essay discussed how living in developed cities is a better option for seeking a job and career growth and how hamlets are proving to be a good residential place because of lesser pollution.
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choice while others
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think
that the suburbs are the topmost locality to have a
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quality of life. This essay will discuss why
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living
in a capital is a
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better
option,
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why villages are the
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better
for a healthy lifestyle.

Developed
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cities
are
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now
the foremost choice of residence by the
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people
. National and International
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companies
are keen to work in a city
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because
of high literacy rate.
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, the demand for trained skilled personnel is increasing in these metropolitan
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areas
and results in migrating of individuals from undeveloped to developed
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areas
in search of jobs.
For instance
, a
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company
name Airtel, which has a head office in Mumbai advertises the requirement of 1500 staff in the call
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centre
.

However
,
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living
a healthy life is too
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important
than any other thing.
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pupils are moving from towns to rural zones
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because
these
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are free from pollution.
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, the cost of
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living
is much lesser.
For instance
, Delhi, the national capital of India is
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now
facing the most respiratory problems
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because
of pollution
in comparison
to the regions which are
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some
distance away from Delhi and are somewhat free from these disorders.

Finally
, In my opinion, whether
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living
in a metropolis or a countryside, depends upon person to person. Take,
for instance
, to choose a
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good
career; it is
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better
to
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live
in a downtown.
In contrast
, villages are best as a residential place to
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live
a hale lifestyle
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because
of the low-level of tainting.

In conclusion
,
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cities
and remote
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areas
are the choice depends upon the need of persons. This essay discussed how
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living
in developed
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cities
is a
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better
option for seeking a job and career growth and how hamlets are proving to be a
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good
residential place
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because
of lesser pollution.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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Victor Hugo

IELTS essay It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the country side. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
308 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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