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It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while other believe that life is better in the country side. Discuss both side and give your own opinion. v.2

It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while other believe that life is better in the country side. v. 2
It is certainly true that, taste and preference of people regarding living in city or village differs from person to person. It is often argued that maximum number of people are being fascinated by city life whilst other disagree and think that in comparison to city life, countryside life is better. This essay agree that in urban areas people will able to enjoy more opportunities in every sectors which helps them to achieve their ultimate goals and be fully satisfied with it. This essay will discuss both points of view. It is clear that most of the people prefer to live in town to grab the infrastructural development like health, education, communication and proper health service to live a standard or quality life which they lack in village. Moreover, living in a city too helps people to develop their career and personality with ability to make unique identity in crowd. It is therefore agreed that urban life is more worthwhile for enhancing the comfort and convenient in human life. For example, this is most evident in my country “Nepal” that city like Kathmandu, Heatuda are being more popularized because of its attractive lifestyle and available of all services. However, many disagree and feel that apart from city life, rural life is better because of its greenery and peaceful environment with caring as well as sharing people. Similarly, in village people are kind hearted and always ready to help any situation with motto of having we feeling with them. Despite this, we feeling is still possible in city life also as they too have emotions with them. For instance, though people are busy in their workaholic life in town they managed to spend a quality time with family by spreading love with each other. In conclusion, city area life is very essential for people to fulfill their desire and live quality life, some people still feel that village is best to live peacefully. At last, I personally believe that town life is essential for human being to get wanted service in time and to fulfill emergency needs.
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certainly
true that, taste and preference of
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people
regarding living in city or
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village
differs from person to person. It is
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often
argued that maximum number of
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people
are
being fascinated
by city
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life
whilst other disagree and
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think
that
in comparison
to city
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life
, countryside
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life
is better. This essay
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agree
that in urban areas
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people
will able to enjoy more opportunities in every
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sectors
which
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helps
them to achieve their ultimate goals and be
fully
satisfied with it. This essay will discuss both points of view.

It is
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clear
that most of the
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people
prefer to
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live
in town to grab the infrastructural development like health, education, communication and proper health service to
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live
a standard or quality
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life
which they lack in
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village
.
Moreover
, living in a city too
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helps
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people
to develop their career and personality with ability to
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make
unique identity in crowd. It is
therefore
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agreed
that urban
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life
is more worthwhile for enhancing the comfort and convenient in human
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life
.
For example
, this is most evident in my country “Nepal” that city like Kathmandu,
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Heatuda
are being more popularized
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because
of its attractive lifestyle and available of all services.

However
,
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many
disagree and feel that apart from city
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life
, rural
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life
is better
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because
of its greenery and peaceful environment with caring
as well
as sharing
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people
.
Similarly
, in
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village
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people
are
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kind hearted
and always ready to
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help
any situation with motto of having we feeling with them. Despite this,
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we feeling
is
still
possible in city
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life
also
as they too have emotions with them.
For instance
, though
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people
are busy in their workaholic
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life
in town they managed to spend a quality time with family by spreading
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love
with each other.

In conclusion
, city area
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life
is
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very
essential for
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people
to fulfill their desire and
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live
quality
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life
,
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some
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people
still
feel that
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village
is best to
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live
peacefully
. At last, I
personally
believe that town
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life
is essential for human being to
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get
wanted service in time and to fulfill emergency needs.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while other believe that life is better in the country side. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
346 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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