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It is said that "Not everything that is learned is contained in books" Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which is more important? why? v.1

It is said that "Not everything that is learned is contained in books" Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which is more important? why? v. 1
Appointing a new employee in an organisation can often be a challenging task. Not only do we have to make sure that the recruit is adept in his field, but we also have to take care of his behavioural issues. While the recruiter evaluates a variety of aspects like qualification, experience and work ethic, many argue that personality should be given more emphasis than technical expertise. However, I believe that this does not always hold true. Personal qualities play an important role in deciding whether the candidate is fit for the job or not. The way the individual reacts to certain situations shows his management style and work ethic. If an individual reacts aggressively to minor issues, it can be deduced that he is temperamental and does not handle pressure well. Moreover, if the person has a bossy attitude and superiority complex, not only would this hamper the efficiency of the company but would also make it difficult for people around him to work. For example, screaming and humiliating subordinates for non-completion of work without understanding the reasons can majorly demotivate other employees leading to dissatisfaction. This may prove to be a threat to the organisation and thus, recruitment of such candidates is not ideal. Be that as it may, technical aspects like experience and qualification are equally important and decide how well the person will perform in his position. Completion of a degree or other qualification sets a standard to the company's requirement and ensures that the candidate has basic and minimum knowledge about the technicalities. In addition, experience justifies the person's ability to apply his theoretical knowledge. Furthermore, skills define his quality of work, all of which helps the organisation to be more efficient and effective and earn a larger margin of profit. For example, a candidate A with 10 years of experience will always be better than another candidate B with 5 years of experience as A will be more familiar with practical work situations and how to deal with them. Therefore, these aspects majorly affect the accomplishment of the company's goals. In conclusion, although some argue that personality traits are a more important criterion than experience, I strongly believe that both these factors have equal weighting as it is clear that a highly experienced individual with a problematic personality does the same amount of harm as a zero experienced person with an ideal personality.
Appointing a new employee in an
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organisation
can
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often
be a challenging task. Not
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only
do we
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have to
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make
sure that the recruit is adept in his field,
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but
we
also
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have to
take care of his
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behavioural
issues. While the recruiter evaluates a variety of aspects like qualification,
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experience
and
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work
ethic,
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many
argue that
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personality
should be
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given
more emphasis than technical expertise.
However
, I believe that this does not always hold true.

Personal qualities play an
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important
role in deciding whether the
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candidate
is fit
for the job or not. The way the individual reacts to certain situations
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shows
his management style and
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work
ethic. If an individual reacts
aggressively
to minor issues, it can
be deduced
that he is temperamental and does not handle pressure well.
Moreover
, if the person has a bossy attitude and superiority complex, not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
would this hamper the efficiency of the
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company
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but
would
also
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make
it difficult for
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people
around him to
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work
.
For example
, screaming and humiliating subordinates for non-completion of
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work
without understanding the reasons can
majorly
demotivate other employees leading to dissatisfaction. This may prove to be a threat to the
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organisation
and
thus
, recruitment of such
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candidates
is not ideal.

Be that as it may, technical aspects like
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experience
and qualification are
equally
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
and decide how well the person will perform in his position. Completion of a degree or other qualification sets a standard to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
's requirement and ensures that the
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candidate
has basic and minimum knowledge about the technicalities.
In addition
,
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experience
justifies the person's ability to apply his theoretical knowledge.
Furthermore
,
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skills
define his quality of
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work
, all of which
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helps
the
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organisation
to be more efficient and effective and earn a larger margin of profit.
For example
, a
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candidate
A with 10 years of
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experience
will always be better than another
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candidate
B with 5 years of
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experience
as A will be more familiar with practical
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work
situations and how to deal with them.
Therefore
, these aspects
majorly
affect the accomplishment of the
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company
's goals.

In conclusion
, although
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some
argue that
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personality
traits are a more
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important
criterion than
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experience
, I
strongly
believe that both these factors have equal weighting as it is
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clear
that a
highly
experienced individual with a problematic
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personality
does the same amount of harm as a zero experienced person with an ideal
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personality
.
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IELTS essay It is said that "Not everything that is learned is contained in books" Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which is more important? why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
398 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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