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It is said that government funding for education should give preference to science-based subjects over others, in an attempt to help boost a countries future development and progress.

It is said that government funding for education should give preference to science-based subjects over others, in an attempt to help boost a countries future development and progress. KlD0R
It is said that government funding for education should give preference to science-based subjects over others, in an attempt to help boost a countries future development and progress. Although an increase in scientific developments can have many benefits to national progress, this essay disagrees that science is the primary contributor. There is no question that the advent of modern science has brought with it a number of improvements to the way that countries and societies function. For example, increases in electrical and computer based technologies have led to much more streamlined and efficient workplaces. Computers and computerized machinery can now do the work of what would have previously been carried out by humans, allowing greater efficiency and higher productivity output. Another benefit that modern science has granted is the development of renewable energy. Sources of renewable energy, such as solar and wind generated power, are beginning to help ease the planet’s reliance on fossil fuels. That being said, an increase in scientific education and development must not be the main measure of a country’s progress. It can be seen that the study of many other disciplines of education can also attribute to a countries progress. Take for example, the Arts and Humanities. Subjects such as History and Philosophy have allowed us to gain a better understanding of humanity and can help to gain more insight into how we can move forward as a race. Other subjects such as the Arts, allow societies and individuals to express themselves creatively through mediums such as music, film and other art forms. It can be argued that this can also help to improve the quality of people’s lives and therefore help towards a countries overall development. In conclusion, although developments in science have led to many beneficial advantages for most countries, science alone is not the key contributor to a country’s progress. In my opinion, most countries would benefit greater from a more well-rounded education, with emphasis on all disciplines, not only that of science.
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government
funding for
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should give preference to science-based subjects over others, in an attempt to
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help
boost a
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countries
future
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development
and
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progress
. Although an increase in scientific
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developments
can have
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many
benefits to national
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progress
, this essay disagrees that
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science
is the primary contributor.

There is no question that the advent of modern
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science
has brought with it a number of improvements to the way that
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countries
and societies function.
For example
, increases in electrical and computer based technologies have led to much more streamlined and efficient workplaces. Computers and computerized machinery can
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now
do the work of what would have previously
been carried
out by humans, allowing greater efficiency and higher productivity output. Another benefit that modern
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science
has granted is the
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development
of renewable energy. Sources of renewable energy, such as solar and wind generated power, are beginning to
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help
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ease
the planet’s reliance on fossil fuels.

That
being said
, an increase in scientific
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education
and
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development
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must
not be the main measure of a
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country’s
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progress
. It can be
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seen
that the study of
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many
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other
disciplines of
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education
can
also
attribute to a
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countries
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progress
. Take
for example
, the Arts and Humanities. Subjects such as History and Philosophy have
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allowed
us to gain a better understanding of humanity and can
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help
to gain more insight into how we can
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move
forward as a race.
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Other
subjects such as the Arts,
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allow
societies and individuals to express themselves
creatively
through mediums such as music, film and
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other
art forms. It can
be argued
that this can
also
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help
to
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improve
the quality of
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people
’s
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lives
and
therefore
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help
towards a
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countries
overall
development.

In conclusion
, although
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developments
in
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science
have led to
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many
beneficial advantages for most
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countries
,
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science
alone is not the key contributor to a
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country’s
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progress
. In my opinion, most
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countries
would benefit greater from a more well-rounded
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education
, with emphasis on all disciplines, not
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only
that of
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science
.
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IELTS essay It is said that government funding for education should give preference to science-based subjects over others, in an attempt to help boost a countries future development and progress.

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