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It is said that day-by-day people’s lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What are the reasons behind that? What can be done to solve this problem? v.6

It is said that day-by-day people’s lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What are the reasons behind that? What can be done to solve this problem? v. 6
The word has changed, there has been evolution and transformation in every aspect of the universe, gone are the days when people were self-sufficient, now everyone wants more and more and this attitude makes people more stressful. Day and day out people have become competitive, they are longing for better and better than good and in this journey, people are inducing themselves to stresses. There were days when people used to be active and enjoy their life by spending time with their families but nowadays people give less time to their families rather they spend their times on the invention of a better lifestyle. For instance, the technology which is prevailing in the present times made a huge impact on a person’s lifestyle. people are pertinently stressed due to the job burdens to deliver their best and to stand in the race. If an employee aims for a good achievement, his employer aims for a better and in this juncture, people are imparting their time to get better out of them and this even increases undue stresses. They being stressful show cast their stress on their family members which in turn makes the whole family live a stressful life. In earlier days, when technology was limited people were not under stress, though stressed their stress was limited, if we see the reason behind stress as technology, we can illustrate using an example of mobile phones. Mobile phones convey a person's mobility and liable to respond to the incoming call at any time. But if the mobile phones were not there, there is a limited chance that the person should respond. And the other reason we see that indicative changes in the family bonds are also causing stresses, people, in earlier days are more cordial and are less stressed compared to the present time. One can overcome stress in their life when they distance themselves from the competitive world, I do not comprehend that man should not be competitive, he should be competitive but should also be self-sufficient. Secondly, he should not take all the burdens on his head which he cannot solve it, he should be a “let it go” attitude that he could overpower the stress. Thirdly stress can be avoided by culturing the body with meditation, yoga, physical workouts, travelling, recreational activities and apart from these he can spend time with family and hear soothing music too. Finally, a change in one’s attitude is the need of the hour for a person to be stress-free if he is always self-sufficient and does not panic to situations. A person is successful if he is stress-free. This is the ultimate success a person needs right now.
The word has
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changed
, there has been evolution and transformation in every aspect of the universe, gone are the days when
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people
were self-sufficient,
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now
everyone wants more and more and this attitude
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makes
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people
more stressful.

Day and day out
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people
have become
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competitive
, they are longing for
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better
and
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better
than
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good
and in this journey,
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people
are inducing themselves to
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stresses
.

There were days when
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people
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used
to be active and enjoy their life by spending
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time
with their
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families
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but
nowadays
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people
give less
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time
to their
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families
rather
they spend their
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times
on the invention of a
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better
lifestyle.
For instance
, the technology which is prevailing in the present
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times
made a huge impact on a
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person’s
lifestyle.
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people
are
pertinently
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stressed
due to the job burdens to deliver their best and to stand in the race.

If an employee aims for a
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good
achievement, his employer aims for a
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better
and in this juncture,
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people
are imparting their
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time
to
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get
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better
out of them and this even increases undue
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stresses
. They being stressful
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show
cast their
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stress
on their
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family
members which in turn
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makes
the whole
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family
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live
a stressful life.

In earlier days, when technology
was limited
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people
were not under
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stress
, though
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stressed
their
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stress
was limited
, if we
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see
the reason behind
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stress
as technology, we can illustrate using an example of mobile phones. Mobile phones convey a person's mobility and liable to respond to the incoming call at any
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time
.
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But
if the mobile phones were not there, there is a limited chance that the
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person
should respond.

And the other reason we
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see
that indicative
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changes
in the
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family
bonds are
also
causing
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stresses
,
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people
, in earlier days are more cordial and are less
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stressed
compared to the present
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time
. One can overcome
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stress
in their life when they distance themselves from the
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competitive
world, I do not comprehend that
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man
should not be
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competitive
, he should be
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competitive
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but
should
also
be self-sufficient.
Secondly
, he should not take all the burdens on his head which he cannot solve it, he should be a “
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let
it go” attitude that he could overpower the
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stress
.

Thirdly
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stress
can
be avoided
by culturing the body with meditation, yoga, physical workouts, travelling, recreational activities and apart from these he can spend
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time
with
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family
and hear soothing music too.
Finally
, a
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change
in one’s attitude is the need of the hour for a
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person
to be
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stress
-free if he is always self-sufficient and does not panic to situations. A
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person
is successful if he is
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stress
-free. This is the ultimate success a
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person
needs right
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now
.
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46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It is said that day-by-day people’s lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What are the reasons behind that? What can be done to solve this problem? v. 6

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
446 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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