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It is often said that to become a successful businessman a tertiary education is not all necessary To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. Give your opinion with relevant examples

It is often said that to become a successful businessman a tertiary education is not all necessary with this statement. Give your opinion with relevant examples ddoP
Irrefutably, education plays a part and parcel role in the human's life. Several individuals urge that higher education does not indispensable in the arena of business. however, the rest of the masses opine against it. I disagree with this notion and this essay would shed light on the valid views in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with the favor of notion, third-level education essential to become an affluent tycoon. The cardinal factor behind it is that higher education assists the people to build up the confidence level as well as the communication skills owing to which, it is uncomplicated for them to deal with others in business. For example, research of oxford university stated that million of entrepreneurs who completed their further education, learn all of the business expertise through the university monthly activities. Another striking point is that through the education campus, individuals learn the various type of techniques to grow their business on a large scale and also aids to confront a lot of barriers in the course of their life. So, it should mandatory for people to get higher education Apparently, it can be manifested that higher education teaches people not only fundamental skills of business which is fruitful for them, but also help to forge the leadership among them due to which it is facile for them to maintain the whole business. Therefore, education is the backbone of any field, it should vital for everybody Nevertheless, certain people tackle their family business without any higher education due to poverty, but they have a long time experience to run the business. To exemplify, according to a survey, it can be vividly seen that 60% of folk handle their family business with full of breakthroughs In the final reckoning, I tend to reiterate that education has its own significance. Nothing cannot be ignored, although people get the experience through their family background, authorities must make education compulsory before enter in any arena
Irrefutably
,
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education
plays a part and parcel role in the human's life. Several individuals urge that higher
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education
does not indispensable in the arena of
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business
.
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however
, the rest of the masses opine against it. I disagree with this notion and this essay would shed light on the valid views in the subsequent paragraphs.

To commence with the favor of notion, third-level
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education
essential to become an affluent tycoon. The cardinal factor behind it is that higher
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
assists the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to build up the confidence level
as well
as the communication
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skills
owing to which, it
is uncomplicated
for them to deal with others in
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business
.
For example
, research of oxford university stated that million of entrepreneurs who completed their
further
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education
, learn
Consider using "all the".
all of the
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business
expertise through the university monthly activities. Another striking point is that through the
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education
campus, individuals learn the various type of techniques to grow their
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business
on a large scale and
also
aids to confront
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a lot of
barriers in the course of their life.
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So
, it
The word 'mandatory' is a noun or an adjective. A verb or adverb is missing or misspelled here, or maybe a comma is missing.
should mandatory
for
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people
to
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get
higher education

Apparently
, it can
be manifested
that higher
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education
teaches
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people
not
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only
fundamental
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skills
of
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business
which is fruitful for them,
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but
also
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help
to forge the leadership among them due to which it is facile for them to maintain the whole
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business
.
Therefore
,
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education
is the backbone of any field, it
The word 'vital' is a noun or an adjective. A verb or adverb is missing or misspelled here, or maybe a comma is missing.
should vital
for everybody

Nevertheless
, certain
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people
tackle their family
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business
without any higher
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education
due to poverty,
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but
they have a long time experience to run the
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business
. To exemplify, according to a survey, it can be
vividly
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seen
that 60% of folk handle their family
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business
with full of
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breakthroughs


In the final reckoning, I tend to reiterate that
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education
has its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
significance. Nothing cannot be
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ignored
, although
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people
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get
the experience through their family background, authorities
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must
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make
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education
compulsory
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before
There isn't usually a preposition after "enter". Did you mean "enter any arena"?
enter in any arena
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IELTS essay It is often said that to become a successful businessman a tertiary education is not all necessary with this statement. Give your opinion with relevant examples

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323 words
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