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It is observed that people these days spend large sums of money on clothes, hair care and other beauty products. Some people see it is as a necessary expenditure whereas other see it as wastage of money. Do you agree or disagree?

It is observed that people these days spend large sums of money on clothes, hair care and other beauty products. Some people see it is as a necessary expenditure whereas other see it as wastage of money. 70266
In modern society, most people have a concern about their appearance and how to get attentions from others. While some people argue that expending money on hair, clothes, beauty products and many more is justified, other thinks that there are alternative method to do it as well. This essay intends to dig in into both sides of the arguments in depth. However, I believe that spending excessive money on their looks is inappropriate.
In modern society, most
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people
have a concern about their appearance and how to
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get
attentions from others. While
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some
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people
argue that expending money on hair, clothes, beauty products and
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many
more
is justified
, other
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thinks
that there are alternative method to do it
as well
. This essay intends to dig in into both sides of the arguments in depth.
However
, I believe that spending excessive money on their looks is inappropriate.
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IELTS essay It is observed that people these days spend large sums of money on clothes, hair care and other beauty products. Some people see it is as a necessary expenditure whereas other see it as wastage of money.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
73 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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