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It is not necessary to have a university degree to be successful in life. Therefore, parents should not force their children to go to University. It is not the best option for everyone.

It is not necessary to have a university degree to be successful in life. Therefore, parents should not force their children to go to University. It is not the best option for everyone. xx07b
Over the half last century, education system has been changing dramatically. Most people spend around fifteen years of their life in education, it is begin from their primary school to university study. In the earlier times, students had the one opportunity to get education to work good position. In addition, parents supported them for important university. In order to have a good university degree they had study hard. Nowadays, however, student do not have to attempt good university to live better. Family should not force their children to go to university. This essay will address the reasons why do not necessary gaining higher education to success their life. The first and crucial think of parents should be learning new lifestyle. They have many responsibilities for their children. They should be some lights their career ways. Because, learning something should be individual. Not only for just a one country’s students but also all countries should several thing is individual learning style. So, Children should not feel pressure from parents. Many scientists say that the recent increase in unemployment may lead to a rise in social problems. Because, all student want to go university and this situation do not allow to learn practical things. They should tend to learn new career path for live which include; better employment opportunities, personal development, the experience of learning new skills or second language to translate. Another important thing, life expectancy. Some experts believe that it is indisputable fact that the changing world system brings many different opportunities for teenagers. Increasing globalization means that there are multinational sectors setting up offices in all major countries. These kind of companies will need more different things than before who have a variety of skills, including life skills. students who without university degrees and have different abilities should find it much easier to obtain a job in this kind of company. for instance, marketing, agricultural, organic food sectors. There are, however, nowadays, most of families have many new idea about university professions. They think that it is the best way to survive in the life. They do not want to know whatever children want from life. Moreover, they think that it is the one thing to be successful in life. These type of thinks bring many forcing in their life. In summary, all parents want to give a good life for their children. But forcing them is not right thing for them. New way and opportunities might give career paths. Because, the world needs to change for humanity.
Over the half last century,
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education
system has been changing
dramatically
. Most
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people
spend around fifteen years of their
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life
in
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education
, it is
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begin
from their primary school to
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university
study. In the earlier times,
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students
had the one
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opportunity
to
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get
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education
to work
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good
position.
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,
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parents
supported them for
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important
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university
.
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order to have a
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good
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university
degree they had study
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hard
. Nowadays,
however
,
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student
do not
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have to
attempt
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good
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university
to
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live
better. Family should not force their
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children
to go to
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university
. This essay will address the reasons why do not necessary gaining higher
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education
to success their life.

The
first
and crucial
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think
of
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parents
should be
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learning
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new
lifestyle. They have
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many
responsibilities for their
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children
. They should be
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some
lights their career ways.
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Because
,
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learning
something should be individual. Not
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only
for
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just
a one country’s
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students
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but
also
all countries should
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several thing
is individual
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learning
style.
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So
,
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Children
should not feel pressure from
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parents
.
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Many
scientists say that the recent increase in unemployment may lead to a rise in social problems.
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Because
, all
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student
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want
to go
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university
and
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this situation do
not
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allow
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to learn
practical things. They should tend to learn
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new
career path for
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live
which include; better employment
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opportunities
, personal development, the experience of
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learning
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new
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skills
or second language to translate.

Another
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important
thing,
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life
expectancy.
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Some
experts believe that it is indisputable fact that the changing world system brings
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many
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different
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opportunities
for
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teenagers
. Increasing globalization means that there are multinational sectors setting up offices in all major countries.
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of
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companies
will need more
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different
things than
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before
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who
have a variety of
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skills
, including
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life
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skills
.
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students
who without
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university
degrees and have
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different
abilities should find it much easier to obtain a job in this kind of
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company
.
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for
instance, marketing, agricultural, organic food sectors.

There are,
however
, nowadays,
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most of families
have
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many
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new
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idea
about
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university
professions. They
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think
that it is the best way to survive in the
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life
. They do not
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want
to know whatever
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children
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want
from
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life
.
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, they
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think
that it is the one thing to be successful in
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life
. These type of
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thinks
bring
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many
forcing in their life.

In summary, all
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parents
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want
to give a
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good
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life
for their
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children
.
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But
forcing them is not right thing for them.
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New
way and
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opportunities
might give career paths.
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Because
, the world needs to
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change
for humanity.
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IELTS essay It is not necessary to have a university degree to be successful in life. Therefore, parents should not force their children to go to University. It is not the best option for everyone.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
419 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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