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It is more important to have a good family than to have friends. Family can always compensate for absence of friendship. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is more important to have a good family than to have friends. Family can always compensate for absence of friendship. 56WoP
According to “blood thicker than water”, the family has one of the most important and integral values in our lives. Therefore, in my opinion, having a good family is much more important than having friends. However, I do not think family can fully compensate for friendship. Everyone knows that we do not choose the family in which we are born. Accordingly, it is a wonderful phenomenon to be born and live in a good family with great relationship. Referring to my personal experience, I did not take the meaning of friendship very deeply until approximately the fifth grade. Since before adolescence, we mostly depend only on family and do not pay much attention to friendship, only for the sake of fun. Just imagine with what good health, psychology, and self-esteem a child can grow up to become a whole person. On the other hand, it is necessary to have good friendships. If, for some incomprehensible or understandable reasons we can not find friends then family will be a good alternative for a while. Friends are like a second family, but this is something that we already choose and build ourselves. The surrounding by people can both worsen and improve the full-fledged person who grew up in a good family. Accordingly, it is important to have no less good friends in our life. One of our friends in the future becomes part of our own family. After all, as an example my mother’s soulmate (my dad) is primarily her best friend. In conclusion, I would like to say that a good family is of fundamental importance and influence. And the path to your own family goes through good relationships.
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has one of the most
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and integral values in our
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lives
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good
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family
is much more
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important
than having
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friends
.
However
, I do not
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think
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family
can
fully
compensate for friendship.

Everyone knows that we do not choose the
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family
in which we
are born
.
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, it is a wonderful phenomenon to
be born
and
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live
in a
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good
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with great relationship. Referring to my personal experience, I did not take the meaning of friendship
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very
deeply
until approximately the fifth grade. Since
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adolescence, we
mostly
depend
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on
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family
and do not pay much attention to friendship,
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for the sake of fun.
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imagine with what
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health, psychology, and self-esteem a child can grow up to become a whole person.

On the other hand
, it is necessary to have
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good
friendships. If, for
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some
incomprehensible or understandable reasons we can not find
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friends
then
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will be a
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alternative for a while.
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are like a second
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,
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but
this is something that we already choose and build ourselves. The surrounding by
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people
can both worsen and
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improve
the full-fledged person who grew up in a
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good
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family
.
Accordingly
, it is
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important
to have no less
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good
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friends
in our life. One of our
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friends
in the future becomes part of our
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own
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family
.
After all
, as an example my mother’s soulmate (my dad) is
primarily
her best friend.

In conclusion
, I would like to say that a
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good
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family
is of fundamental importance and influence. And the path to your
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own
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family
goes through
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good
relationships.
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IELTS essay It is more important to have a good family than to have friends. Family can always compensate for absence of friendship.

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