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it is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts then it is for them to learn facts. v.2

it is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts then it is for them to learn facts. v. 2
Unless we apply the knowledge for the greater good of the society, what is the use of knowledge? The knowledge will have a real potential when a person can use it to improve the world with its potential, like Edison and Tesla did. I explain more on this in my next paragraphs. Understanding concepts helps students to see the applications. For example, everyone knows that the hot air moves upwards. But what is the use of it? when we know hot air is less denser compare to the cooler air, we can build a ventilator in the house near the ceiling. Which actually makes sure the hot air goes out of the home and makes the house tends to cold in the summer days. Also, everyone knows about that the people can be attracted towards their business by providing the service for cheaper price or by showing offers, which could reduce the price of the service. The application of the knowledge matters, it not only improves the capability to apply but also improves to make things better. To illustrate, everyone knows cashbacks provided by the online wallets and stores. It is based on simple idea that people gets attracted if we show them an incentive (cashback), people will be using the services offered by them. But over the time people will be used to it. How to overcome this? to overcome these real-world problems, one needs to have diverse knowledge on not just the facts but also how the ideas and concepts. Like, how google come up with scratch cards, which are not just based on the human psychology for incentives but also based on probability. Which is attracting people to move towards google more than any other e-wallet, because of the possibility of the more earnings. Though it is important to know the concepts, we can not say we will have enough time to understand everything, in that case, we need to go through the facts needed instead of wasting time, which is not productive for a person' s personal research. To illustrate, is someone says Sun raises in the east, you can ask why is it raising in the ease and why is it setting in the west. But if your interest does not lie on the solar system and its understanding, it is simply waste of time. To conclude, understanding the concepts and ideas actually improves the way a person sees a problem and help them think differently and also come up with solutions based his/her knowledge on different concepts.
Unless we apply the
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for the greater
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of the society, what is the
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use
of
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knowledge
? The
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knowledge
will have a real potential when a person can
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use
it to
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improve
the world with its potential, like Edison and Tesla did. I
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explain
more on this in my
next
paragraphs.

Understanding
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concepts
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helps
students to
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see
the applications.
For example
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knows
that the hot
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air
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moves
upwards.
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But
what is the
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use
of it?
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when
we
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hot
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air
is
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less denser
compare to the cooler
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air
, we can build a ventilator in the
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house
near the ceiling. Which actually
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makes
sure the hot
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air
goes out of the home and
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makes
the
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house
tends to
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cold
in the summer days.
Also
, everyone
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knows
about that the
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people
can
be attracted
towards their business by providing the service for cheaper price or by showing offers, which could
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reduce
the price of the service. The application of the
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knowledge
matters, it not
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only
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improves
the capability to apply
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but
also
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improves
to
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make
things better. To illustrate, everyone
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knows
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cashbacks
provided by the online wallets and stores. It
is based
on simple
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idea
that
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people
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gets
attracted if we
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show
them an incentive (cashback),
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people
will be using the services offered by them.
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But
over the time
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people
will be
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used
to it. How to overcome this?
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to
overcome these real-world problems, one needs to have diverse
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knowledge
on not
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just
the facts
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but
also
how the
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ideas
and
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concepts
. Like, how google
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come
up with scratch cards, which are not
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just
based on the human psychology for incentives
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but
also
based on probability. Which is attracting
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people
to
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move
towards google more than any other e-wallet,
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because
of the possibility of the more earnings.

Though it is
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important
to
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know
the
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concepts
, we can not say we will have
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enough
time to understand everything,
in that case
, we need to go through the facts needed
instead
of wasting time, which is not productive for a
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person&
#039; s personal research. To illustrate, is someone says Sun raises in the east, you can ask why is it raising in the
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and why is it setting in the west.
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But
if your interest does not lie on the solar system and its understanding, it is
simply
waste of time.

To conclude
, understanding the
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concepts
and
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ideas
actually
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improves
the way a person
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sees
a problem and
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help
them
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think
differently
and
also
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come
up with solutions based his/her
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knowledge
on
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different
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concepts
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay it is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts then it is for them to learn facts. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
423 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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