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It is more important for a building to serve a purpose than to look beautiful. Architects shouldn’t worry about producing building as a work of art. v.7

It is more important for a building to serve a purpose than to look beautiful. Architects shouldn’t worry about producing building as a work of art. v. 7
The buildings have both the structure and function, but here the question arises, which one is more important- the structure or the function of a building.   The structure consist of the outlook of the building, all kind of embellishment comes under it. More attention was given to the structure blocking area or renovation of any building according to modernization, whether it is the home, hotel, mosque, church, restaurants, school, college, universities or office. The  architecture was more curious and apprehensive regarding designed and outlook. But the fact is that functions are more important for a building is more valuable if it is full filling all the criteria of serving well, full filling all the needs of people. Currently, in the developed countries, buildings are ranked in the long run of adornment and thus beautiful buildings attract more visitors to rush in for living in. Those sorts of buildings even bring  more money compared to other ordinary buildings. It’s a universal phenomenon that beauty attracts the brain, many studies were conducted in the USA on the structure or function of the building, which revealed that majority of people were found to be associated with the stunning structure of the building, one more fact was discovered that curvy buildings attract more people than straight line building. In the developing countries more focus was given to the functions like serving quality, comfort, and cheap rates etc, as more focus was education rather than expensive school or college building, hotel stay with cheap rates rather than classy hotel with full luxuries room, shopping from a store rather than a branded stuff from a big well-decorated shopping mall. The developing country also began to follow the developed country in the long run of the outer beauty of a building which is an alarming sign for creating a sense of comparison or complex among people. Instead of creating a structure wise comparison, the functional comparison should be encouraged, as those building should be appreciated who are full filling their functions well with cheap rates with the major focus on productive goals.
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function
,
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here the question arises, which one is more
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important
- the
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structure
or the
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function
of a
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building
.
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The
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structure
consist of the outlook of the
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building
, all kind of embellishment
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comes
under it. More attention was
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given
to the
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structure
blocking area or renovation of any
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building
according to modernization, whether it is the home, hotel, mosque, church, restaurants, school, college, universities or office. The
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architecture was more curious and apprehensive regarding designed and outlook.
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But
the fact is that
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functions
are more
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important
for a
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building
is more valuable if it is
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full
filling all the criteria of serving well,
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full
filling all the needs of
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people
.

Currently
, in the developed
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countries
,
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buildings
are ranked
in the long run of adornment and
thus
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beautiful
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buildings
attract more visitors to rush in for living in. Those sorts of
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buildings
even bring
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more money compared to other ordinary
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buildings
. It’s a universal phenomenon that beauty attracts the brain,
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many
studies
were conducted
in the USA on the
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structure
or
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function
of the
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building
, which revealed that majority of
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people
were found
to
be associated
with the stunning
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structure
of the
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building
, one more fact
was discovered
that curvy
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buildings
attract more
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people
than straight line
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building
. In the developing
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countries
more focus was
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given
to the
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functions
like serving quality, comfort, and
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cheap
rates etc, as more focus was education
rather
than expensive school or college
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building
, hotel stay with
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cheap
rates
rather
than classy hotel with
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full
luxuries room, shopping from a store
rather
than a branded stuff from a
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big
well-decorated shopping mall. The developing
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country
also
began to follow the developed
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country
in the long run of the outer beauty of a
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building
which is an alarming
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sign
for creating a sense of comparison or complex among
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people
.

Instead
of creating a
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structure
wise comparison, the functional comparison should
be encouraged
, as those
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building
should
be appreciated
who are
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full
filling their
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functions
well with
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cheap
rates with the major focus on productive goals.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay It is more important for a building to serve a purpose than to look beautiful. Architects shouldn’t worry about producing building as a work of art. v. 7

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
346 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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