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Many people believe that having a fixed punishment for all crimes is more efficient What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a fixed punishment v.1

Many people believe that having a fixed punishment for all crimes is more efficient What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a fixed punishment v. 1
It is true that implementing common punishment for all crimes can be an effective way to protect the society. While this regulation has many benefits, there are also drawbacks which are worth considering. Having a fixed punishment will reduce the criminal’s intention to create crimes. It could aware the offenders that any kind of offense will be punished with a strong law, and deter them from criminal activities. For example, in Saudia Arabia, there have a law for burglar, is cut a hand of lawbreaker irrespective of items were stolen. In addition, this punishment system is easy to implementation and less time consuming for verdict. Hence, victims would not suffer for long judgment process. In this way, having a fixed punishment can divert the criminal from anti-social work and people enjoy a safe society. However, despite the above mentioned advantages for having a fixed retribution, it has a negative effect in a society. This situation is against the fair and egalitarian society. People will receive same punishment whether their crimes are major and minor, and they would lose the respect for laws. As a result, criminals could be encouraged to involve multitude crimes. A recent survey shows that in Bangladesh, 30% younger burglar become Hijacker in their adult age because they aware the punishment will be the same imprisonment for that crimes. Another down side is that teenage offenders will deprive from rehabilitation. They have to stay with same prison with other criminals and motivate to involve illegal activities. Thus, this could increase the social crime rates which are not desirable outcome for a country. In conclusion, it seems that the potential dangers of providing a similar punishment for all crimes in a society are more significant than the possible merits.
It is true that implementing common
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punishment
for all
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crimes
can be an effective way to protect the
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society
. While this regulation has
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many
benefits, there are
also
drawbacks which are worth considering.

Having a
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fixed
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punishment
will
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reduce
the
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criminal’s
intention to create
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crimes
. It
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could aware
the offenders that any kind of offense will
be punished
with a strong law, and deter them from
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criminal
activities.
For example
, in
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Saudia
Arabia, there have a law for burglar, is
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cut
a hand of lawbreaker irrespective of items
were stolen
.
In addition
, this
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punishment
system is easy to implementation and less
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time consuming
for verdict.
Hence
, victims would not suffer for long judgment process. In this way, having a
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fixed
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punishment
can divert the
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criminal
from anti-social work and
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people
enjoy a safe society.

However
, despite the above mentioned advantages for having a
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fixed
retribution, it has a
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negative
effect in a
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society
. This situation is against the
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fair
and egalitarian
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society
.
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People
will receive same
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punishment
whether their
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crimes
are major and minor, and they would lose the respect for laws.
As a result
,
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criminals
could
be encouraged
to involve multitude
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crimes
. A recent survey
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shows
that in Bangladesh, 30% younger burglar become Hijacker in their adult age
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because
they aware the
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punishment
will be the same imprisonment for that
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crimes
. Another
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down side
is that teenage offenders will
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deprive from
rehabilitation. They
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have to
stay with same prison with other
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criminals
and motivate to involve illegal activities.
Thus
, this could increase the social
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crime
rates which are not desirable outcome for a country.

In conclusion
, it seems that the potential
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dangers
of providing a similar
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punishment
for all
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crimes
in a
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society
are more significant than the possible merits.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people believe that having a fixed punishment for all crimes is more efficient What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a fixed punishment v. 1

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4 paragraphs
291 words
6.0
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