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It is more enjoyable to have a job when you always three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you have a job where you work five days a week with shorter hours. v.2

It is more enjoyable to have a job when you always three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you have a job where you work five days a week with shorter hours. v. 2
Nowadays, working hours is pivotal portion of people' s everyday life, which may exert an influence on their feelings and performance. In effort to enhance employees' conditions, managers and policy makers have implemented several procedures. One of the determining factors related to employees is hours that every one spend per day. In this regard, choosing the best strategy to follow has caused a heated debate. Some people prefer to work three days per week for long hours. while others believe otherwise--that is--being interested " regular" working hours--five work day in a week with shorter hours. The idea to which I subscribe is that working in regular basis as more beneficial. My reasoning is based on quite a few reasons, three conspicuous ones of which have been elaborated upon in the following paragraphs. To begin with, it incontrovertibly axiomatic that employees have a far-reaching effect on efficiency. Unless they enjoy a decent condition, efficiency will be guaranteed. Often people often loose their effectiveness when they overwork thereby becoming tired. Indeed, the more hours one works, the less quality his or her performance will be. However, by working shorter each day, people often have more energy during the whole work day. Statistics have also demonstrated that companies and organizations in which regular working hours are employed are more successful entities in comparison with otherwise firms. Additionally, employees tend to have more promotion if their weekdays be in regular fashion. It stands to reason that not only do employees promote quickly, but firing and loosing their careers will be less probable. In contrast, people having less work days usually cannot do their best, which results they will not be able to flourish their potentials. However, regular basis work hours is similar to a double-edged sword which has it' s own disadvantages like increasing traffic congestion, and spending more time for heating and cooling facilities. Despite this, managers and authoritative should bite the bullet and attempt to find other alternative solutions than reducing work days to overcome or at least alleviate these problems. Eventually, working five days a week results in better relationship with family members. The irony of this situation is that at the first glance, it seems that by having more free time, people can spend time with their families. However, in reality spending much time with each other, some conflicts may be occurred between family members. As a result, far-sighted people often do not take working in regular basis for granted. All in all, I have a penchant for the idea that it is better to work five days a week with short hours because of aforementioned reasons. Therefore, it is highly recommended that governments and other private companies grant their unqualified support to the plan in which all employees should world in regular basis.
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is pivotal portion of
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people&
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employees&
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policy makers
have implemented several procedures. One of the determining factors related to
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employees
is
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hours
that every one spend per day. In this regard, choosing the best strategy to follow has caused a heated debate.
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Some
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people
prefer to
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work
three days per
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week
for long
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hours
.
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while
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otherwise
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being interested
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hours--five
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day in a
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week
with shorter
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hours
. The
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idea
to which I subscribe is that
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working
in
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regular
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basis
as more beneficial. My reasoning
is based
on quite a few reasons, three conspicuous ones of which have
been elaborated
upon in the following paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, it
incontrovertibly
axiomatic that
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employees
have a far-reaching effect on efficiency. Unless they enjoy a decent condition, efficiency will
be guaranteed
.
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Often
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people
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often
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loose
their effectiveness when they overwork thereby becoming tired.
Indeed
, the more
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hours
one works, the less quality
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his or her
performance will be.
However
, by
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working
shorter each day,
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people
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often
have more energy during the whole
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work
day. Statistics have
also
demonstrated that
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companies
and organizations in which
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regular
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working
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hours
are employed
are more successful entities
in comparison
with
otherwise
firms.

Additionally
,
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employees
tend to have more promotion if their weekdays be in
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regular
fashion. It stands to reason that not
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only
do
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employees
promote
quickly
,
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but
firing and loosing their careers will be less probable.
In contrast
,
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people
having less
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work
days
usually
cannot do their best, which results they will not be able to flourish their potentials.
However
,
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regular
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basis
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work
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hours
is similar to a double-edged sword which has
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it&
#039; s
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disadvantages like increasing traffic congestion, and spending more
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time
for heating and cooling facilities. Despite this, managers and authoritative should bite the bullet and attempt to find
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other
alternative solutions than reducing
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work
days to overcome or at least alleviate these problems.

Eventually
,
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working
five days a
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week
results in better relationship with family members. The irony of this situation is that at the
first
glance, it seems that by having more free
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time
,
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people
can spend
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time
with their families.
However
, in reality spending much
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time
with each
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other
,
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some
conflicts may
be occurred
between family members.
As a result
, far-sighted
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people
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often
do not take
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working
in
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regular
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basis
for granted.

All in all, I have a penchant for the
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idea
that it is better to
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work
five days a
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week
with short
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hours
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because
of aforementioned reasons.
Therefore
, it is
highly
recommended that
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governments
and
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other
private
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companies
grant their unqualified support to the plan in which all
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employees
should world in
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regular
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basis
.
18Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
60Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay It is more enjoyable to have a job when you always three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you have a job where you work five days a week with shorter hours. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
464 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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