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It is less common now that modern people look after their elders day prefer professional to take care of them it is

It is less common now that modern people look after their elders day prefer professional to take care of them it is b33W6
It is true that it has become less common in modern generation to look after their older ones. Most of the young ones hire care taker to take care of them. I believe that it is negative development. To commence with, the elders feel aloneloness and it also effect on development of upcoming generation. To elaborate, when the child left their elders in old age houses, they feel bored and become alone while their children have their hectic schedule. Moreover, the upcoming generation do not able to acquire morale and in some cases they are unknown by their cultural history. For example, most of people belonging to hindu religion in international countries do not know about the history their own culture because of there are no grandparents in their homes. Thus, the children of new generation becoming unaware about their culture and tradition so it is important to have old people in the homes to get specified knowledge. Further strengthening the views, it effect on mental health of a child. To explicate it, when the young ones observe the behaviour of their parents towards their grandparents, they will do the same and assign a care taker or left them in old age house in future. For instance, the survey was conducted in England and observed that according to genes and learning ability of a child, they do the same that they learn in their homes because couple of time the child spend time in their house. As a result, the masses should take care of their elders by themselves and respect them so that child get good habits. In conclusion, it effect negatively when the people left the old people at responsibility of care taker, it effect on them as well as young ones.
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. Most of the young
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hire
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taker to take
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of them. I believe that it is
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development.

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aloneloness
and it
also
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effect
on development of upcoming generation. To elaborate, when the
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child
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left
their elders in
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old
age
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houses
, they feel bored and become alone while their children have their hectic schedule.
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, the upcoming generation do not able to acquire morale and in
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cases they are unknown by their cultural history.
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, most of
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belonging to
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hindu
religion in international countries do not know about the history their
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own
culture
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because
of there are no grandparents in their homes.
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, the children of new generation becoming unaware about their culture and tradition
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it is
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to have
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people
in the homes to
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get
specified knowledge.

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Further
strengthening the views, it
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effect
on mental health of a
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child
. To explicate it, when the young
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observe the
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behaviour
of their parents towards their grandparents, they will do the same and assign a
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taker or
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left
them in
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old
age
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in future
.
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, the survey
was conducted
in England and observed that according to genes and learning ability of a
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child
, they do the same that they learn in their homes
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because
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couple of
time the
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child
spend time in their
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house
.
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, the masses should take
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care
of their elders by themselves and respect them
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so
that
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child
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get
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good
habits.

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, it
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effect
negatively
when the
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the
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at responsibility of
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taker, it
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on them
as well
as young
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ones
.
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IELTS essay It is less common now that modern people look after their elders day prefer professional to take care of them it is

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  American English
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6.0
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