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It is impossible to help all people around the world in need so governments should focus on people from their own country.

It is impossible to help all people around the world in need so governments should focus on people from their own country. lj09b
It can be argued that government should prioritize the needs of their own citizenry instead of providing international aid. I agree to this statement up to certain extend based on the current scenario across the world during this pandemic. Firstly, government should be focusing on the needs of current residents in the country rahter than providing international support. Almost every in country the world is going through the second wave of Covid-19 and is in need of vaccines. Instead of exporting the produced vaccine and other sanitary items, countries should be spreading awareness amongst the people and providing the required supplies ot needy by evaluating the current needs as per the province and hotspot areas. Along with that international aid always brings in more expenses than revenue to the country and the time consumed during shipment and delays caused to several calamities could also be a cause of major issues for the country and the people. In addition to that, importing and exporting is also taking away employment from so many residents of the country and also causing recession in the market. One thing that I believe all of us have learned during this pandemic that it is very important to support local business in order to maintain the economy of the country as well as smooth functioning of the labor market. contradictory to that, some countries might be in more need of support and resources compared to Canada. Considering the example of India right now, the country is facing major covid issues. Currently so many people are dying due to lack of oxygen and the world being one big family if we do not provide support to them then they will loose this war against a disease. We should not forget that during the first wave, India supported lot of countries by exporting medications and in recent before second wave India also sent out some vaccines to support several other countries. If we do not stand up for each other then there will not be any kind of relations between different countries. Also sometimes it might be more expensive for the country to produce a commodity locally than exporting or maybe due to unfavorable weather conditions, in that case it is a better idea to export goods as you get to know and try different products. In conclusion, It is always a best idea for the leadership to look after their own people first and then provide additional support and help to others around the globe. It is very important to look at a bigger picture. And let us not forget that maintain relations with people always brings good and maybe more business for the country.
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be argued
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government
should prioritize the
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needs
of their
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own
citizenry
instead
of providing international aid. I
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agree
to this statement up to certain
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extend
based on the
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current
scenario across the world during this pandemic.

Firstly
,
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government
should be focusing on the
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needs
of
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current
residents in the
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country
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rahter
than providing international
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support
. Almost every in
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country
the world is going through the second wave of Covid-19 and is in
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need
of vaccines.
Instead
of
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exporting
the produced vaccine and
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other
sanitary items,
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countries
should be spreading awareness amongst the
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people
and providing the required supplies
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ot
needy by evaluating the
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current
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needs
as per the province and hotspot areas. Along with that international aid always brings in more expenses than revenue to the
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country
and the time consumed during shipment and delays caused to several calamities could
also
be a cause of major issues for the
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country
and the
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people
.

In addition
to that, importing and
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exporting
is
also
taking away employment from
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so
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many
residents of the
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country
and
also
causing recession in the market. One thing that I believe all of us have learned during this pandemic that it is
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very
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important
to
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support
local business in order to maintain the economy of the
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country
as well
as smooth functioning of the labor market.

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contradictory
to that,
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some
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countries
might be in more
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need
of
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support
and resources compared to Canada. Considering the example of India right
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now
, the
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country
is facing major
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covid
issues.
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Currently
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so
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many
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people
are dying due to lack of oxygen and the world being one
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big
family if we do not provide
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support
to them then they will
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loose
this war against a disease. We should not forget that during the
first
wave, India supported lot of
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countries
by
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exporting
medications and in recent
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before
second wave India
also
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sent
out
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some
vaccines to
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support
several
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other
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countries
. If we do not stand up for each
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other then
there will not be any kind of relations between
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countries
.
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Also
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sometimes
it might be more expensive for the
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country
to produce a commodity
locally
than
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exporting
or maybe due to unfavorable weather conditions,
in that case
it is a better
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idea
to export
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goods
as you
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get
to know and try
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different
products.

In conclusion
, It is always
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a
best
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idea
for the leadership to look after their
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own
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people
first
and then provide additional
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support
and
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help
to others around the globe. It is
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very
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important
to look at a bigger picture. And
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let
us not forget that maintain relations with
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people
always brings
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good
and maybe more business for the
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country
.
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IELTS essay It is impossible to help all people around the world in need so governments should focus on people from their own country.

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447 words
5.5
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