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it is important to construct new buildings rather than maintain old one to what extand do you agree or disagree v.2

it is important to construct new buildings rather than maintain old one to what extand v. 2
Nowadays communities from all over the world have different thoughts about construction and conservation buildings. some demographics of society claim that it is better and more prospective to build new settings instead of simple waste government' s money on maintaining old buildings. this essay will argue why preservation of old parts of towns and cities is entirely necessary despite some opposite views. people have always moderated and upgraded the appearance of their places of living in terms of new centuries. While some believe, that old building could be harmful for entirely local society, provoking physical injures, other suggest that many of them could be also hazardous for the whole environment, because they seem to not be ecological-friendly. Consequently, to give an example, we now can witness a huge modern constructions from steel, concrete and glass, as well as buildings, which are almost not harmful for the natural world, developing more and more ideas how to do our residential areas closer to the environment. these instances have bolstered existed ideas and opinions, why it is better to make money investments into a new building, rather than eldest. despite the minor benefits of construction new settings, the idea that we only waste money of conservation old one is completely preposterous. we would have never known about our ancestors and how they suppose to live if we had never seen all countries treasures and their history. it is important to leave a footprint as well as the world heritage for our future generation. Indeed, to give an example, which even everyone know about, there was a huge fire in Paris and to this reason the significant part of Notre Dam was incinerated. However, there is already a vast amount of money that is given by charities and authorities to reconstruct the pearl of the city. Overall, the idea of preservation and renovating old settings is greatly outweigh one, which is against it, because without these buildings it will mean that we do not have the history at all and nothing had done on the planet. To sum up, this essay argued that people, who think it is more profitably to invest money into construction of new settings, are narrow-minded and underestimate the effects of ignoring eldest. In my opinion, communities should make a greater effort to try to save our history, to prevent future cities being the same, all from glass, steel and iron, and this is why I believe that total expenditures in only modern construction is completely inappropriate way of building our future.
Nowadays communities from all over the world have
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different
thoughts about
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construction
and conservation
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buildings
.
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some
demographics of society claim that it is better and more prospective to build
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new
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settings
instead
of simple waste
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government&
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money
on maintaining
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old
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buildings
.
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this
essay will argue why preservation of
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old
parts of towns and cities is
entirely
necessary despite
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some
opposite views.

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people
have always moderated and upgraded the appearance of their places of living in terms of
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new
centuries. While
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some
believe, that
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old
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building
could be harmful for
entirely
local society, provoking physical injures, other suggest that
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many
of them could be
also
hazardous for the whole environment,
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because
they seem to not be ecological-friendly.
Consequently
, to give an example, we
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now
can witness a huge modern
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constructions
from steel, concrete and glass,
as well
as
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buildings
, which are almost not harmful for the natural world, developing more and more
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ideas
how to do our residential areas closer to the environment.
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these
instances have bolstered existed
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ideas
and opinions, why it is better to
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make
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money
investments into a
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new
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building
,
rather
than eldest.

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despite
the minor benefits of
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construction
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new
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settings
, the
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idea
that we
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only
waste
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money
of conservation
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old
one is completely preposterous.
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we
would have never known about our ancestors and how they suppose to
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live
if we had never
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seen
all countries treasures and their history.
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it
is
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important
to
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leave
a footprint
as well
as the world heritage for our future generation.
Indeed
, to give an example, which even everyone
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know
about, there was a huge fire in Paris and to this reason the significant part of
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Notre
Dam
was incinerated
.
However
, there is already a vast amount of
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money
that is
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given
by charities and authorities to reconstruct the pearl of the city.
Overall
, the
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idea
of preservation and renovating
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old
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settings
is
greatly
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outweigh
one, which is against it,
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because
without these
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buildings
it will mean that we do not have the history at all and nothing had done on the planet.

To sum up, this essay argued that
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people
, who
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think
it is more
profitably
to invest
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money
into
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construction
of
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new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
settings
, are narrow-minded and underestimate the effects of ignoring eldest. In my opinion, communities should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a greater effort to try to save our history, to
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prevent
future cities being the same, all from glass, steel and iron, and this is why I believe that total expenditures in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
modern
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construction
is completely inappropriate way of
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building
our future.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS essay it is important to construct new buildings rather than maintain old one to what extand v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
422 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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