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It is important that we maintain and protect the beautiful building of the past, even if it is expensive for countries to do so. Do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

It is important that we maintain and protect the beautiful building of the past, even if it is expensive for countries to do so. v. 1
There have been discussions recently whether the government should use large sums of money to maintain old buildings of the past. Many people claim that this is an important task and the expenses shouldn’t matter. In this essay, I will give you my opinion and why I agree with this statement. To begin with, it costs tremendous amount of resources to maintain ancient and old buildings. Even though, it might seem inefficient economically to invest in the restoration and maintenance of these historical buildings, they have a lot of value for the culture. For instance, the Greeks are proud of their culture and they have a great interest in showing it through the historical buildings like the acropolis. These ancient structures give the people of Greece a common identity and a feeling of fellowship. Furthermore, surveys have shown that countries that have maintained many buildings of historical value also have a better understanding of their ancestry, which can be a great attribute in the perseverance of their culture. Additionally, keeping historical buildings intact can give huge boosts in tourism. Culture and history are two of the most important factors for tourists to choose their destination. For example, when Japan opened for foreign visitors to come in and see the temples from the Edo era, tourists swarmed to the country. Thus, there can be economical advantages in using money to protect old buildings of the past. In conclusion, I believe that the maintenance of historical building is important for cultural and historical identity, as well as it can have positive effects on the economy.
There have been discussions recently whether the
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government
should
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use
large sums of money to maintain
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old
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buildings
of the past.
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Many
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people
claim that this is an
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important
task and the expenses shouldn’t matter. In this essay, I will give you my opinion and why I
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agree
with this statement.

To
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begin
with, it costs tremendous amount of resources to maintain ancient and
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old
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buildings
.
Even though
, it might seem inefficient
economically
to invest in the restoration and maintenance of these
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historical
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buildings
, they have
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a lot of
value for the culture.
For instance
, the Greeks are proud of their
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culture and
they have a great interest in showing it through the
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historical
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buildings
like the acropolis. These ancient structures give the
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people
of Greece a common identity and a feeling of fellowship.
Furthermore
, surveys have shown that countries that have maintained
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many
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buildings
of
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historical
value
also
have a better understanding of their ancestry, which can be a great attribute in the perseverance of their culture.

Additionally
, keeping
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historical
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buildings
intact can give huge boosts in tourism. Culture and history are two of the most
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important
factors for tourists to choose their destination.
For example
, when Japan opened for foreign visitors to
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come
in and
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see
the temples from the
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Edo
era, tourists swarmed to the country.
Thus
, there can be economical advantages in using money to protect
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old
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buildings
of the past.

In conclusion
, I believe that the maintenance of
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historical
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building
is
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important
for cultural and
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historical
identity,
as well
as it can have
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positive
effects on the economy.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay It is important that we maintain and protect the beautiful building of the past, even if it is expensive for countries to do so. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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